The Hero Within Us

Far too scared to take a step ahead
Afraid of what lies before us... and what we’ve left behind
Every doubt in my mind consumes my confidence
As I stand on the highway to my destiny
One right step may build my life
one wrong step and everything that I ever dreamt of will turn into ashes
I fall deep down the dreadful abyss
As I feel my uncertainty destroy my dreams
Why do I do this to myself?
What am I so afraid of?
Is it about going against the convention or walking the path less travelled?
 I feel like a pathetic coward inside
As I let others crush away my dreams
Let others lead my life
Repress myself from being who I am, from being independent
Am I so afraid of being free to choose my own destiny?
Carve my own history?
Tread the way my heart leads to?
Is following our passion not worth a thing?
Has money taken the place of passion
which we can sell out in any auction ?
Why do we compromise with our aspirations?
Is it not worth fighting for?
Open up your eyes to the truth
Take a look within your soul
You’ll hear a voice that speaks for your heart
It will guide you find your way to your joy inside
Why are we so scared of death that we barely are able to truly live?
For being alive is not the same as merely existing
If you truly stand up and fight for what you believe in
You’ll understand how precious life really is
It is then that we’ll  realise the value of every breathe we take in
So beyond the stains of broken dreams
There lies a truth so feared and unseen
I feel my eyes close so tight
And drift away far beyond the line
I see these rays pass through me
Now I’m a soul, immortal, that’s set free
Try to see the hero that lies
Inside each one of us

Reviews

[C. Rose]

A confidence booster. Knowing that others also waver like this makes it easier to handle being a writer.

"one wrong step and" - You didn't capitalize the first letter of the line
"Does following our passion not worth a thing?" - "Is following..."
"crush away my dreams" - "crush away" felt odd to me

I enjoyed the flipping between describing the theme and questioning the theme.
Also enjoyed the theme of course.

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[Metal Orchid]

the fight never ends, consistency matters! Beautiful words

[Aura Devour]

:D THANKS a lot

[WhereItResides]

Very good poem. I recommend you go back and double space this, it is a longer piece the lines being so close together make it a tad difficult to follow. The flow of this poem could be improved, going from "aspirations" to "for" doesn't exactly roll of the tongue. When going from small to large syllables you have to be careful of them sounding awkward. I do really enjoy the meaning of this poem though, it was very good. I enjoyed this poem greatly and beyond some flow issues it was very well done.

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[Aura Devour]

thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

"There lies a truth so feared and unseen
I feel my eyes close so tight
And drift away far beyond the line
I see these rays pass through me
Now I’m a soul, immortal, that’s set free
Try to see the hero that lies
Inside each one of us"

words of truth and wisdom. So many great contemplation in this write. Bravo................

[Aura Devour]

Thank you so very much.. I wanted the poem to be inspiring actually

[Sami Khalil]

It is. You are welcome...:).....................

[Free_Soul]

It is indeed very difficult to fight out our fears and come up as a hero. n that hero within us knows no bounds! a very good poem :) n u have explained ur views very beautifully.. Keep it up :) :)

[Aura Devour]

Yes.. we all have a hero within us but it is always very difficult to let it surface us.. BTW thanks a lot! :)