happily ever after

happily ever after

A Poem by Avanthika
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Do some one really believes in "happily ever after". For the ones who do believe in happily ever after end good for you and for those who dont believe in it , here's a composition for you.....

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You read a comic, you make a laughter,
Because the story ends happily ever after.

But life is not a fairy a tale, 
Many a times you may fail
While you look for prosperity,
there will always be irregularity.

When rational's are newly arisen,
find yourself in state prison
life spent alone in jail,
no one to get you out in bail.

Thoughts gathered in the drafter,
never like to remember thereafter.
you regret things hereafter 
realizing life is not happily ever after.
Life is not happily ever after.


© 2014 Avanthika



Author's Note

Avanthika
thought it would be nice to write something on happily ever after topic.

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hi avanthika ,
this is nice writing.... apologies for reviewing it late.. i will split this review into two sections what i liked and what i got confused about.
the things that i liked:
1) great theme to dig upon.
2) mixed emotions.

things that found weird about
1) you could have used better words
2)thereafter, hereafter and drafter these words are founded to be stressed to rhyme
3) there is no connection between of first two lines to rest of the piece

well , its just suggestion no offense... enjoyed reading it
keep smiling :) peace

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is really good. Nice word choice.

Posted 5 Months Ago


its well written,just i want to know can life come in a position where only happiness' are formed?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hi avanthika ,
this is nice writing.... apologies for reviewing it late.. i will split this review into two sections what i liked and what i got confused about.
the things that i liked:
1) great theme to dig upon.
2) mixed emotions.

things that found weird about
1) you could have used better words
2)thereafter, hereafter and drafter these words are founded to be stressed to rhyme
3) there is no connection between of first two lines to rest of the piece

well , its just suggestion no offense... enjoyed reading it
keep smiling :) peace

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't know 'happily ever after' feel by everyone or not but as I write something in page or in a device it soothes like I had no worry for it. In real life we need to give the touch of happiness to every end. Either its good or bad, so bad. There is a positive way where you can find happily ever after.
Good one I liked it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avanthika

3 Years Ago

thank you little writer.
That is one cute way of bringing out a truth. Happily ever after - I don't believe there is smoething like it. Being positive is goos, smiling in times of trouble could make you stronger but in reality that smile is a fake one and deep down inside you are troubled.

I liked the poem Avanthika. I am really happy to see the way you have improved your writing. Keep writing...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avanthika

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much frnd :), glad you liked it
A well thought piece of art. It's true, there's no happily ever after in real life because life itself is a struggle, till your very last day, you'll be worried about something. So there's no ever after.
Great work...:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avanthika

3 Years Ago

so happy you liked it .
Unlike the book or a comic, our life story is still running.. there can be many form of endings but mov forward
I like your view and how this is writtern, interesting use of words :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avanthika

3 Years Ago

thank you so much dear.
This is really a thought provoking piece with some didective notes . Life is a struggle. It ca not be happily ever after. It goes on changing with facing new challenges day after day. And the struggle ends with life. But we are enthusiastic to accept all the oddities entertaining in between the dire circumstances. We use to hear the tag "happily ever after" in tales. It seems comfortable talking like this...


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avanthika

3 Years Ago

very well said sir.
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M.A.Rathore

3 Years Ago

Thanks Avanthika
Most welcome..
I love this. You speak the truth. Keep writing girl.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avanthika

3 Years Ago

thank you dear :)
You are indeed correct, Its only in fair tales you find Happily ever after. But in real life, thou there are happy times, there are challenging times too. Well Sais

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Avanthika

3 Years Ago

Glad you liked it.

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