British Summertime

True Shakespearian octet iamb sonnet

I ache to feel a Summers day

Without the rain fall on my skin

All darkened clouds have blown away

Relinquished sunbeams from within.

To dance in golden fields of corn

To feel the earth beneath my feet

Instead there's greyness so forlorn

And raindrops drum a solemn beat.

To smell the sweet perfume of sun

And bathe in oceans tranquil blue

To kiss my love and then to run

'Neath Pheobes' subtle purple hues.

But this is British Summertime

My Wellies tell me its sublime.

Author's Note

A rather tongue in cheek sonnet that came when I was looking for my muse under my bed. More of an enjoy, than take it seriously :)

Reviews

[er. divenita]

pleasant, indeed

[Richard Williams]

This is a very pleasant poem with a good meter and wonderful phrasing. A really good read, with such lines as, "To smell the sweet perfume of sun". Nice job.

[Dan]

I bloody loved it!! This is my favourite thing I have read of yours so far. Reminds me of Glastonbury! Thank you x

[Coyote Poetry]

I was station in Germany for three years. The weather is similar to my home state Michigan. Summer comes quick. Best enjoy the warm days of summer. Ain't a lot of them. I like this poem. Nothing as wonderful as a warm day and nothing to do. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Ni1408]

I love it! This is British summertime :)

[Fran Marie]

A well crafted sonnet to be sure

this would be a contender entry should you decide

to enter my contest~`Sonneteers lend me thy tears~

Nicely DonE!!

[Abdul Aziz]

Perfect meter :) I tried to find out mistakes, if any, after reading Dinesh's comment, but I was unable to, lol. Great rhyme, imagery and flow. Wit oozes from every stanza. And I really like the concluding couplet. Why does Britain get the stick so often though?
I know how well versed you are in meter. I'd love to see more such writes from your pen, as they are, quite simply, a joy to read!
Beautiful.

[Ruth]

Stunning love!
A great piece of work with a lot of great metaphors! Blown away by this! Simply, one word, beautiful! lol
xx

[Dinesh Sairam]

Meter problems often. But, I've never seen a sonnet with iambic tetrameter (Well, a I said, meter is off at places though). The poem was highly dreamy and I loved it a lot. Phrases like "Relinquished sunbeams from within", "oceans tranquil blue", "To kiss my love and then to run" added to the joy of reading a sonnet.

But the couplet was disturbing. It's like, it interrupted the otherwise splendid and beautiful sonnet. I really can't explain why.

Kudos. Keep writing.