Semira

This is just the first (1) and second (2) stanza of my new poem. (semira)

I heard you are there,
living my world so cold in here,

the gloomy night makes me fear,
thinking of you so dare,

your loud face, call me so near,
but i feel you dont care,


you sound like a perfection bird,
i think of you lonely on my bed,

the gloomy night make my heart fade,
you're not here, makes me sad,

terrified, sad, uncertain, shattered,

thinking of you on my lonely bed.....

Author's Note

Thanks for reading.

Reviews

[Leandro Mendez]

great write man, sad theme, but it happens, well written

[ayosonolowo]

Thank you so much

[Prritiy]

a sweet poem of remembrance in love, keep on writing.

best wishes

[ayosonolowo]

Thank you....

[Prritiy]

you are welcome :)

[Cody Williams]

Very nice poem! Thanks for sharing it!

-CW

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot sir

[one sky]

Nice poem, A. Hope you reunite with the bird so that it won't be lonely anymore. LOl.

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot

[Sami Khalil]

"the gloomy night make my heart fade,
you're not here, makes me sad,

terrified, sad, uncertain, shattered,

thinking of you on my lonely bird....."

A very nice poem. I like those lines the most...Thank you for posting...:)

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[closed]

this is a cool poem
it invoked the various senses when reading
not too long or short
nails what a good poem should have in terms of form and prowess as well

nice work with it^

-Dream

[ayosonolowo]

Thanks alot

[closed]

no problem pal