Complex Multiplex

Complex Multiplex

A Poem by B-law
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A man describes the complexity of loving someone who doesn't love him back.

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They say you can do whatever you want if you put your mind to it

That it can be yours if you pursue it

You can have anything you want

Time and hard work will conquer the hunt

You can succeed at anything large or small

If you believe you can, you can have it all

With your eyes filled with fire

You can have any desire

So if I can have anything I want if I put in the time and effort to pursue

Then why in the world can I not have you

For you, I put in the hard work and time

But at the end of the day you’re still not mine

I can conquer any test, any competition, and any conflict

But, I can’t conquer your heart, now that is making me sick

A strong desire will get you anywhere they say

But it seems that my desire is only pushing you away

They say it comes down to who wants it more

But I want you the most and I can’t have you, isn’t that a sore

Isn’t that like the striking of a sword

To a soldier committing suicide after forfeiting the war

Because he sees that his efforts are futile

The world has moved on and he’s just a little child

All I know is hard work and dedication

You cannot kill my desire with any medication

That is what brought me my success

That is what I know best

But it isn’t my best

If I can’t have what’s beating behind your chest

You are the most complicated test

That is something I must confess

Why is that I get and succeed anything if I put the work in

If I have the want and desire to win

But when it comes to you, my want seems to be a sin

Is this ever asked by men and women

They say don’t worry you’ll get it as time goes by

Because then you’ll change into a different guy

But change is something that happens over time I find

So how can I change if I can’t feel time

Because every day feels the same

I feel like I’m playing the same game

Because everyday

My desire pushes you away

These are the questions I aimed to find

Why my want can’t have you mine

Is it because the will, want, and work I put in isn’t enough

Or is it because those are too much

But then I finally came to a realization recently

Something that just came to me

That it isn’t that those are too much or too slight

It’s that those aren’t right

I try to put laws and steps where they don’t belong

I only look at things right or wrong

See, there isn’t a rule book on how to capture the heart

And that was what was tearing me apart

I was trying to treat you like a task

I do it, do it, get better, and succeed, I pass

But human beings aren’t test

And thinking like that has put me in a mess

I was thinking like a machine, all logic

As if you were a lock I could just pick

I put an absolute on every situation

And when it doesn’t work out as I studied and planed for I have frustration

Human beings aren’t all logic, there’s emotion

And this I had to add to my notion

Because like I said all I know is hard work, dedication, and will

But through pushing that I have miss out on the feel

Because I was too bent on having success

That I over did the process

A person once told me that this isn’t a competition or something I can have victory

But it is something that can be brought to me

Sometimes I think this is too complex, and sometimes I think it’s too simple

And sometimes I feel like a pebble in the river causing a temporary ripple

So is it because I look at things one sided

Like one rule applies to all and you cannot fight it

Is it because of the universe and it’s holding me back

And it’s keeping me where I’m at

Or maybe I don’t know what any of this is for

And for that, I don’t know what to do anymore.



© 2016 B-law



Author's Note

B-law
This was a poem I written back in high school last year. I won a contest for it, gave it too a girl, didn't work out ahaha. But anyways feel free to give me your feedback and comments on this. I would appreciate it. Thanks!

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This poem has meaning and emotion, you have put a lot of work into it to make it significant and I believe you succeeded.


Posted 7 Months Ago


B-law

7 Months Ago

thank you for your review.It's crazy that I actually wrote it two years ago.
s.ms

7 Months Ago

wow, really?!
B-law

7 Months Ago

yeah it was when I was 17 around this time in 2015. I wrote it for a contest in creative writing cla.. read more
I've learned this isn't true:

"They say you can do whatever you want if you put your mind to it"

There will always be people better than you in whatever field. Perfection is too much of a pressure in careers and education.

Posted 7 Months Ago


The big lie parents tell is, "You can be anything you want to be."

For a tall girl cannot be the best jockey, a midget can't be the greatest hurdler and my cousin will never be a famous singer for she sounds like a strangling cat.

We must be realistic so that we don't get our hopes and hearts broken.

I'm sorry about it not working out with the girl. I suppose she didn't deserve you then.

Posted 7 Months Ago


This is one of the best poems I have ever read. It was emotional, philosophical and thought provoking.
You have done amazing job by writing this poem because it will remain in my mind forever.
There are many thing I would like to discuss and first among them is "So how can I change when i can't feel time" this was one of the best line which struck me first. It has a deeper meaning which leaves a the reader in awe.
Secondly the war part, it was beautifully written and I liked your imagination in there, like when you said "Committing a suicide".
The part where you think that you are thinking too logically and that is the main reason, I loved it as it sums up everything you wanted to convey with this writing.
In the end I would praise your writing abilities and I wish you good luck in your writing future ahead.

Posted 1 Year Ago


ok, first, i am not surpirsed you won the contest. it is a winner. but wait i have a few problems with it that i think need to be considered which btw don't at all take away from its winning status. (i just want to say here, as my thought on what the poem is speaking about, that unfortunately hearts cannot be had at all. but wanting one that belongs to someone you admire is always worth a million poems and whatever one might see fit to put into it. this is just my thought at the moment). i do think this is a great poem, but i think if you take it and read it a hundred more times certain changes will come up that you will want to make, that will better capture what you want to say. of course, if you don't feel inclined to do that, you probably shouldn't. that is how i approach poetry. sometimes i never make changes after only the minimalist of changes, sometimes i rework a poem for months. i had a little trouble with the structure of lines and grammar here and there. maybe it could be a little shorter; not much, just a little. in all, the success of this poem greatly outweighs the faults. hope you write a million more

Posted 1 Year Ago


B-law

1 Year Ago

thank you very much for your review. I always appreciate it when people give me their thoughts on my.. read more
Man this poem is tight. I really got into it and it made my mind get lost in the words you wrote. Good work I am a fan.

Posted 1 Year Ago


This poem is all about the process- the hunt- for a thing that's not just a thing, but a human.
You can read it all and it feels very mechanical almost absent of the feeling for the girl-
but consumed by the how to obtain her.

But through pushing that I have missed missed out on the feel.
Captures it all.



Posted 1 Year Ago



Actually, you have put good emotion on this, and it's inspirational than what I created.

Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message.

-Jan

Posted 1 Year Ago


its a really meaningful poem... :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Great visuals and great story telling. It had plot and substance. When you add substance to writing it gets that much better. It gets the reader hooked on it and make them feel as if they are part of it. As long as their is that emotional connection between the reader and the story then it's good. The connection you were able to established in the writing gives the reader a sense of comfortably that they are in tune with the writing. So that way when the writing is over, the reader wants more, and wishes it didn't end. I feel the same way when I watched a movie or tv series that I get so attached to, I never want it to end. And for this writing, I didn't want it to end. You had me hooked, and I am sure everyone else who read it was hooked as well. That is good, that is what you want for people to keep wanting more. The way you put the story together makes me feel like my life is different for that moment in which I read your story. I love it, and it was beautiful. Just keep posting stories like this, and you'll have a good following

Posted 1 Year Ago



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