"A gossamer clouds the potential" a bit of a foggy prelude to the striving survivor, for with perseverance you can emerge from the smoke, and only admire the achievement while asking yourself, "was it worth it?" Yes.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I definitely agree we can emerge, it was meant to be a description of the way some people feel when .. read moreI definitely agree we can emerge, it was meant to be a description of the way some people feel when they feel like they can't reach their goals. Thanks for the review and for reading!
9 Years Ago
That's the way I read it, fear of failure, but fighting toward your goal, and basking in the achieve.. read moreThat's the way I read it, fear of failure, but fighting toward your goal, and basking in the achievement when met. A well done thought and expression.
9 Years Ago
made some alterations. better or worse?
9 Years Ago
I liked the original, it wasn't hard to understand, but this does make it clearer. I hope that helps.. read moreI liked the original, it wasn't hard to understand, but this does make it clearer. I hope that helps.
9 Years Ago
sorry, to bother you so much I just take feedback really seriously. And now? or still original? I wa.. read moresorry, to bother you so much I just take feedback really seriously. And now? or still original? I want the point to come across but I also don't want to be too simple. I feel the original was more powerful but the point may get across easier now.
Not a problem, I'm always willing to help. I believe the original had a better impact, this version .. read moreNot a problem, I'm always willing to help. I believe the original had a better impact, this version makes it easier to understand your intent. I think it was fine to begin with; even though its the title 'Gossamer' doesn't work wholly. It does in the respect of being held back, having to push through murk or web, but it doesn't usually refer to being opaque in nature—which again can work on two levels depending on your full intent. Mind you these are just suggestions. In my opinion I would go with the one you feel expresses your original thought the best.
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your help, I've obviously read some of your writing. Definitely a fan, I value.. read moreThank you so much for your help, I've obviously read some of your writing. Definitely a fan, I value your opinion and judgement very much.
9 Years Ago
No Problem. I'm always glad to help, and thank you for the kind words.