Metamorphosis of a God

Metamorphosis of a God

A Poem by Raven Moonchild
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For my dad. :)

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A bluejay, proud and flying high.
 A gust of confusion blows him down.
Poisons silenced his cry,
 chains pulling him to drown.
Wings tucked away;
 head hung in shame.
Shutting out the day,
 happiness to disclaim.
Summer rains unshackled his bonds,
 the comforting winds of fate.
Freedom finally dawned.
 Mighty eagle swift and great.

Live free, God of the Sun.
 Victorious from the battle won.


© 2017 Raven Moonchild



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A very well written piece....

Excellent structure and flow of rhyme throughout the entire poem. Enjoyed the analogy of a fallen god rising again and soaring on the wings of victory. It fits well with your tribute to your Father. They are our God's after all.

Very well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

lol Thank you. :) I also have one called "Metamorphosis of a Goddess" for my mum.
Doodley

3 Months Ago

Only fair! Will read it when i can.
Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

:) Thanks.



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.......this is so good, I'm at a loss at how to begin my praiseful review! So imaginative, and profound. "Poisons silenced his cry" should be in the present, since the whole poem essentially is, and for musicality purposes, it should read "Some poison silences his cry". Well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

Thank you again, my kind friend for your review. I feel honoured to have you read any of my work. :D
emipoemi

3 Months Ago

always a pleasure.
A very well written piece....

Excellent structure and flow of rhyme throughout the entire poem. Enjoyed the analogy of a fallen god rising again and soaring on the wings of victory. It fits well with your tribute to your Father. They are our God's after all.

Very well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

lol Thank you. :) I also have one called "Metamorphosis of a Goddess" for my mum.
Doodley

3 Months Ago

Only fair! Will read it when i can.
Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

:) Thanks.
Beautiful
Exquisite
Mesmorising special
Love it

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Raven Moonchild
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I'm a 22 year old Pansexual Pagan who has been a poet for nearly ten years. I come from a big, open minded and heavy metal loving family. :) I hope you enjoy my work. more..

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