Hidden Light

Hidden Light

A Poem by Raven Moonchild

Darkness can no longer shroud;
 pushing with all my might.
Standing tall and proud,
 winged child of light.
Defiance of the doe;
 chains rust away.
Freedom of the crow;
 no more decay.
Demons fell;
 forever I fly.

Heart healed and free.
Locked away for none to see.

© 2017 Raven Moonchild



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I like it. There's a poignant sense of determination and tenacity with a tinge of darkness. My favorite line was "winged child of light" ... it evoked the most beautiful image (to me) and effectively mirrored the brillance within the poem. Well done!

- William Liston

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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What a beautiful poem. There's something about your style of writing

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

1 Month Ago

Something about it in a good way or bad way?
obsessedwriter

1 Month Ago

Definitely a good way
What beautiful words. What a gift you have. Well done

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a wonderful poem as far as I can see. I am a horrible poet, mind you, but each part and image brings the thought of the light and the meek conquering an obstacle.


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it. There's a poignant sense of determination and tenacity with a tinge of darkness. My favorite line was "winged child of light" ... it evoked the most beautiful image (to me) and effectively mirrored the brillance within the poem. Well done!

- William Liston

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There's something very solemn and mystic about this poem. Very nice. It could do the poem much good were it to be fleshed out and explored a bit more, for the "demons fAll" line (better to have that in the present like the rest of the poem) sounds like a cool refrain, and in that position, it makes the musicality sound a bit off. Other than that, amazing! Well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

As always, thank you for your review, my friend. :D
emipoemi

3 Months Ago

All in a day's work, ma'am :)
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SSR
Nice one, lie

Heart healed and free.
Locked away for none to see.

That line is dripping with insecurity and vigilance...


Posted 3 Months Ago


Raven Moonchild

3 Months Ago

That last line shows that I trust no one with my heart after being so betrayed.
SSR

3 Months Ago

Thays what i said
SSR

3 Months Ago

Free and healed heart................

Well is it

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Raven Moonchild
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I'm a 22 year old Pansexual Pagan who has been a poet for nearly ten years. I come from a big, open minded and heavy metal loving family. :) I hope you enjoy my work. more..

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