Love Notes

Love Notes

A Poem by Raven Moonchild

Curves slanted just so;
 punctuation to every line.
Letters erased and rewritten;
 words perfected in love.

I hold her letters close to me,
 every morning and every night.
When I close my eyes, it's her face I see.
 My one and my light.

Every sentence a precious string,
 leading to my heart.
Every pause an angel's breath;
 my only reason for life.

As I await her next reply,
 each second longer than the last.
With every blink, I fear I may die.
 Love broken in a cast.

The little things said,
 give power of the gods.
Every loving word,
 a feather in my wings.

© 2017 Raven Moonchild



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I can feel the love tonight! (lol) This is amazing! I particularly like the alternating rhyme/no rhyme scheme! You really pulled it off nicely! My only qualm is "my one and my light" - the musicality is iffy with that line.....something like "my one and only light" would work better. Not saying it should be that particular line, but rather the line is missing a syllable for the musicality to bridge across. This is otherwise very well done!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

1 Month Ago

As always, your review is greatly appreciated, my friend, and I'm glad you enjoyed my work. :D
emipoemi

1 Month Ago

it was a pleasure to read. Keep at it.



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The little things said,
give power of the gods.
Every loving word,
a feather in my wings.

This is such a life truth. That our tiny acts of love give the gods their power. I adore that sentiment. It had nothing to do with cupid or his aim - it was your lover who handed him the bow. The loving words adding feathers to your wings, I think, says everything to me. That these are the words, these are the moments, these are the tiny monumental gifts that give your heart flight, that usher you upward to soar. This imagery is beautiful.

I loved your timing and the grace of this piece. No heavy-handed rhyming, no reach for the words. Your prose reads as effortlessly as a love letter itself. Leaving a reader ready for more, wishing for another word, another line, just one stanza more - it is made perfect in its succinct package.

Very well done.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

2 Weeks Ago

Wow, thank you for such a fantastic review!! lol Aye, I handed my heart to someone who I can't be wi.. read more
Absolutely beautiful writing. Love it!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

2 Weeks Ago

This was born out of love and longing. Thank you very much. :)
I think letters are much more personal. When sent from someone special, they come into focus more. Every detail is admired.

Nicely done Raven. :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much, my friend. :)
Nope... Nuh-uh... Me? Powerful writing...? Not a chance... THIS is powerful writing...! Every curve and slant of line... Every breath in-between time... This entire thing befitted its opening words perfectly...*Metal horns* (Because why not, although it almost feels wrong to put under such beautiful work, haha...)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

2 Weeks Ago

lol I find my writing is most powerful when I'm bummed out. (bear hugs) Don't short change yourself,.. read more
Silente

2 Weeks Ago

Amazing, yes... Powerful to the point of pulling someone into a vortex of being... Maybe not quite a.. read more
Love letters are much a thing of the past, so it was very refreshing to read this well structured poem.
Nicely done.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Raven Moonchild

1 Month Ago

lol Thank you and I know. I still write letters to my friends. It feels more meaningful than texting.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

1 Month Ago

I prefer letters too
Raven Moonchild

1 Month Ago

They're so awesome and an excellent excuse to write more.
I can feel the love tonight! (lol) This is amazing! I particularly like the alternating rhyme/no rhyme scheme! You really pulled it off nicely! My only qualm is "my one and my light" - the musicality is iffy with that line.....something like "my one and only light" would work better. Not saying it should be that particular line, but rather the line is missing a syllable for the musicality to bridge across. This is otherwise very well done!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

1 Month Ago

As always, your review is greatly appreciated, my friend, and I'm glad you enjoyed my work. :D
emipoemi

1 Month Ago

it was a pleasure to read. Keep at it.

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I'm a 22 year old Pansexual Pagan who has been a poet for nearly ten years. I come from a big, open minded and heavy metal loving family. :) I hope you enjoy my work. more..

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