Lazarus

Lazarus

A Poem by Raven Moonchild

Creation of Frankenstein,
I give to thee,
this heart of mine.


with fireworks that spark and buzz when our eyes first meet.
with cannons that blast in your mind when our voices greet.
with bonfires that set the world ablaze when our hands touch in enemies defeat

© 2017 Raven Moonchild



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I enjoyed the way you framed this work. It reminds me of an incantation and builds a framework of hushed sacred trust. Something akin to calling for a dark entity and praying you've the ability and spiritual fortitude to contain it. Having recently read a work on the Tin Man - my mind immediately correlated the two - the gift of a heart, the most priceless gift to us from the gods, given to a creature manufactured by the hands of man. This is an almighty big thought, expansive.

Your segway into action, of the purpose for the gift, of the harvest of the sowing and the relationship bonds cultivated gave me the chills the first time I read it. Having read it through several more times, and taking the time to thoroughly savor each line and word and phrase, I think it is the combination of not just romance and sexual fireworks, but it is the ultimate victory that sets my imagination working and the goose flesh to prickling.

Perhaps it is in the giving of our most sacred, singular gift that we can ever truly triumph over our enemies, our nightmares and our demons. It is a steep price to pay, but the outcome you paint makes if FEEL worth it, and that is an emotional component I didn't see coming.

Exceptionally well written. Pleasing to the eye. Sumptuous on the tongue and satisfying to the last syllable. Huge Kudos!

This is going in my favorites!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

1 Week Ago

Wow, I am honoured by such a deep review. :D



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Is a about a female that is willing to give her heart to a player as she wants to experience for herself what shes's heard with the intentions to give for rate her judgement as she is not giving her mind.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed the way you framed this work. It reminds me of an incantation and builds a framework of hushed sacred trust. Something akin to calling for a dark entity and praying you've the ability and spiritual fortitude to contain it. Having recently read a work on the Tin Man - my mind immediately correlated the two - the gift of a heart, the most priceless gift to us from the gods, given to a creature manufactured by the hands of man. This is an almighty big thought, expansive.

Your segway into action, of the purpose for the gift, of the harvest of the sowing and the relationship bonds cultivated gave me the chills the first time I read it. Having read it through several more times, and taking the time to thoroughly savor each line and word and phrase, I think it is the combination of not just romance and sexual fireworks, but it is the ultimate victory that sets my imagination working and the goose flesh to prickling.

Perhaps it is in the giving of our most sacred, singular gift that we can ever truly triumph over our enemies, our nightmares and our demons. It is a steep price to pay, but the outcome you paint makes if FEEL worth it, and that is an emotional component I didn't see coming.

Exceptionally well written. Pleasing to the eye. Sumptuous on the tongue and satisfying to the last syllable. Huge Kudos!

This is going in my favorites!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

1 Week Ago

Wow, I am honoured by such a deep review. :D
Beautifully Romantic

Cute and awesome read

Matthew

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A nice write, Raven.

I see you are going through the catalogue of classic monsters in your writes! Small note: typo on Frankenstein.

I enjoyed the poem.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Raven Moonchild

2 Weeks Ago

lol Thank you and I didn't even realize I misspelled that.
I have no words.....my voice is in my awe!! Well done!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raven Moonchild

2 Weeks Ago

(blushes) Thank you, my friend. :) I'm trying something new and I'm glad to see it's working so well.. read more

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I'm a 22 year old Pansexual Pagan who has been a poet for nearly ten years. I come from a big, open minded and heavy metal loving family. :) I hope you enjoy my work. more..

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