If not, then why?

Why the show

 

If not, then why?

If not, then why…

            Does the ocean so blue provide a clearer view?

            That can only be seen by an unknown who

            The creatures they swim, so deep in the pool

            Chasing their prey in large water schools

            Jumping in the air, with their mouths open wide

            Diving back down, with their tails waving bye

 

            Does the warm water rise, in a eerie colored mist?

            Twirling around, from the dark abyss

            Pushing along with churning winds

            Outer clouds forming with a counter clock spin

            Hostile it seems, it’s all in vein

            Down pour blankets with drenching rains

            An eye that is open, with a penetrating view

            Like something is watching and is looking for you

 

            Does the garden of beauty, have a sense of grace?

            As the color symbols, like the human race

            Do the trees so tall, brush by the clouds?

            Screaming to echo, just a tad bit loud

            The fields so high, with an abundant green

            You have to wonder, how they can be seen

 

            Does the ground reach up to kiss the heavens?

             The days I wonder, they say it took seven

            Mounds of soil, cake the baring surface

            While frozen precipitation, signifies a purpose

            Trickling down the trenching path

            moving the earth with a chocolate bath

            Filling the river, with rocks and debris

            Forming channels, out to the sea

 

            Do the birds fly by, carpeting the sky?

            Even their young, have learn to fly

            So many varieties,  cannot be explain

            Never the one, is exactly the same

             

            If not the only one’s

                        Then why the spectacular sun

            With the laminating glow

                        Watching and wondering, who’s next to go

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Some more food for thought

Reviews

[Deborah Shepard]

Inspiring , makes one think beauty is written in many topics

amazing poetry

[Kari]

Cool, pretty cool. I wish I knew the answer!! :D

A wonderful writing.... I felt as a friend sitting there with you and discussing this and that the beauty and sadness and knowing that is how it is planned, wondering and figuring out and yet... the full answer is still just out of reach.. Wonderful writing..

[None]

I read your poem twice, because I wanted to know to whom the question, "If not, then why?" was being asked. At first, I thought Humanity, but then I thought, perhaps, God (I have no idea your religious denomination or even if you have one, so I use this word merely as a generalization and for clarity throughout my review), something unnameable and larger than Humanity as a singular entity, yet composed of humanity as a whole? So, perhaps, the question is multi-dimensional: to the self, to humanity, and to the All of Humanity (i.e. God)? Then you begin the poem, seeming to answer why? with other questions (an aspect I rather like, which is what gives your poem that metaphysical, philosophical, existential, etc. tone). I comprehended the body of the poem as the "not" part of the question, "If not, then why?" and the "why" part of the question is what is between the words, what is perceived by the larger picture you paint with the building of each stanza. The ocean, forest, earth itself, the sky, and beyond (which is alluded to in the last stanza "If not the only one's/Then why the spectacular sun?"). You paint everything as connected somehow. The last stanza is where your words finally address the underlying tones behind the "why?" It's like the penultimate question: "Why are we here?" "Why am I alive?" "Why do I exist?" and "What is existence?" Or perhaps I have been too influenced by the font? LOL

Indeed, another mental morsel. Bravo!

[justjenn_2u]

Lots of food for thought : ). I wish I knew the answers to even just a few of these questions.

I like your thinking pattern, how deep you delve to have such questions. Shows how deep of a thinker you are!

Good write as usual!

[THERISA]

Interest poem cover a huge spread of topics in its lines of verse. Felt that it could made tigher and more focus by limiting the scope that it tries to cover. The best stanza is the one about the dolphins/whales, which you spend time and really develop your ideas to the fullest. Mind you, i have a huge love for dolphins and all things related to them, but its stops with the NFL. Your idea which generated this poem is a strong and wonderful one. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.

Therisa

[Barbara Walker]

It sure is food for thought! Good rhymes and some imagry serious and some on the lighter side that tickled me. "Does the warm water rise, in an eerie colored mist,
twirling around, from the dark abyss...

"Trickling down the trenching path,
moving the earth with a chocolate bath"...

My favorite lines! Barbara (eyepoetress)

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Its inspiring and philosophical. IT makes me think. Good piece.

[Dani California]

I love your writing! Again, nice work! Wonderful imagery, great rhyme and flow.

Fabulous write!

[youngwriter222]

This is very good! There is alot of feeling and imagery in this and that to me make a great poem.

"Does the garden of beauty, have a sense of grace
As the color symbols, like the human race"

You catch the readers attention in the first line and it makes them want to read to the end.

Good write