Last-Breath Bubble

short and old, rereading a journal and re-found it, kinda liked it this time.

Last-breath bubble
Couldron broth
Deep-sea poison
Kills so soft
Under all your lethal stares
Confusing laws with double-dares
Drown-me cries
Silenced dives
And falling through
Your teary skies
Touched by angelfish wishing you
Could take this dying journey too.

Reviews

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Smooth, easy flowing poem....great work :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts in the interesting poem. I like the many strong statements in the poem. Last lines left a question. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[dreaming dame]

beautiful, and the rhyming is so smooth. Love it:)