Pump-Girl

on a cold, rainy day...

like needles and pins

that burn through skin

and freeze the blood within

the Winter rain

starts up again

like a slap before the Spring

 

the price is up

spirits down

so's the storm that sudenly broke

standing out

on a corner in town

a poor girl's getting soaked

 

the pump-girl freezes

over-teased

by harsh determined breezes

what later will

make her ill

marked by coughs and snot and sneezes

 

still she smiles

though sad all the while

greeting every vehicle with an 'excited' "hi!"

so silently raging inside

just wondering why

what she did to be punnished by the sky    

  

Author's Note

okay, i lie
i'm not mad at the sky
just the people who seemingly don't care.

Reviews

[Ashley Myers]

love the flow with this. it was so easy to read

[Linear]

Ok ok, whats a Pump Girl? and whats that picture about?

Now the poem was written really well, the picture was painted with emotion and colour, I could feel the rain running down my neck Brrr brrrr and the slap before spring we all know so well :O)

[.]

great title ..caught my imagination..and wasn't disappointed..great write

[xjust-for-me.x]

alot of ppl dont care for nothing but themselves.. this is a me me me world. enjoyed the write ty

[schanzilla]

i dig this poem. "like a slap before the spring" is one of the best thoughts i've ever heard or seen expressed. done quite well.