Lost in the Labyrinth

Lost in the Labyrinth

A Poem by Bala Gorthi
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The innocent ignorant soul is no better than a lamb

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My lamb is lost in the labyrinth of thoughts
Wandering in zigzag paths, its soul is fragmented in slots
Hurt by the thorny bushes of insults, its heart bled
Into the soft touch of graceful soft memories, it fled

It looked at the disgraceful grace of the universe
In sending it as novice which became a curse
Being artless is better than being artificial it thought
To reach a conclusion it got through a somersault

Pleasures, pains and memories of past
Oh dear, they are there never to be lost
Desires and needs are bridges to the future
Oh father, they are befouling it's nature.


© 2016 Bala Gorthi


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Interesting piece. Lamb, soul, ignorance - strong theme here. I liked treatment of the subject here. I think, it's very artful to have Lamb as a focal point. These lines come through beautifully for me - "Being artless is better than being artificial it thought
To reach a conclusion it got through a somersault"
Very good reading.. thanks bala!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

Thank you Abhilash for reviewing my work. Glad that you got the theme rightly.
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When the words do not come easily, it's better not to write a forced poem.....""Being artless is better than being artificial"....that is what that line means to me. All human beings experience emotional pain in life. Escaping it is really not possible. It remains in the heart and soul forever. Our past need not define our future, but it is always there...in the background. A thought provoking write, Bala. Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

Thank you Lydia, for for reading this poem and appreciating.
Sometimes I see myself as that.. read more
Very very deep imagry...... Wonderfully written.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

Thanks you for visiting and appreciating this write..
we are destroying nature and each other, like lambs to the slaughter...gentleness is non-existent in this world, love being fragmented and bleeding out...

and the pains and memories of the past are at least real...what there is now seems to have no heart or soul....

it's tragic, but the young end up growing up so cold and cynical...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

Simplicity and innocence no more seen around not even in children. The whole world is after smartne.. read more
Interesting piece. Lamb, soul, ignorance - strong theme here. I liked treatment of the subject here. I think, it's very artful to have Lamb as a focal point. These lines come through beautifully for me - "Being artless is better than being artificial it thought
To reach a conclusion it got through a somersault"
Very good reading.. thanks bala!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

Thank you Abhilash for reviewing my work. Glad that you got the theme rightly.
There are phas.. read more
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Some very nice phrases and wording here......

Your first stanza is particularly strong; very descriptive phrasing. Your use of a lamb as the central figure of the poem is very astute, since they are very innocent and prone to becoming lost.
The message i am understanding from this poem is that it is difficult to be an innocent in this harsh reality, being thrown into the depths of the labyrinth, and relying on memories and common thoughts to find one's way through the maze.

It is nicely executed, with those exceptional words in the first stanza. A very nice attempt at putting your thoughts into poetic verse. Keep up the writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading my piece. Your comments mean a lot to me.
You have very accurately interpr.. read more
You've done some interesting word crafting here, such as "lamb is lost in the labyrinth" (good alliteration) . . . "thorny bushes of insults" . . . "being artless is better than artificial" . . . altho when I try to put all these nicely crafted phrases together, I'm not hit over the head with a message of clarity or understanding. Instead I dig to figure out what this means (my personal preference is straightforward writing). In your byline "no better than a lamb" suggests disdain for the lamb. Thru-out the poem, you say "my lamb" once & then the rest of the time referred to as "it" . . . I think the pronoun "it" distances us from whatever inner thoughts & feelings you share. It's like the narrator is disconnected from this lamb of which he/she speaks. I'm not sure how to interpret this, overall.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

In this poem I wanted to tell how a soul is always lost in the Maze of thoughts. I called the soul a.. read more
barleygirl

7 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to explain . . . I re-read & I see what you mean. I don't think you sh.. read more
Very well written poem :-)
I like how you compared an innocent soul with a lamb.
I loved these lines :-
It looked at the disgraceful grace of the universe
In sending it as novice which became a curse
Being artless is better than being artificial it thought
To reach a conclusion it got through a somersault
I am really fond of the way you use poetry to describe the reality.
Again, a very well crafted write :-) :-D
keep writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bala Gorthi

7 Years Ago

Thank you Gorthi, for your words of appreciation for this small one. I am glad, you loved some line.. read more

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