Bellow of the slow

Bellow of the slow

A Poem by Bala Gorthi

 

Feeling low because I am slow.

There is a silent row, affecting my glow.

Rapid flow of thoughts never on dearth.

But in black and white, there is no growth.

 

When things rush, I am in bush.

But when ready in lush, they show a hush!

Some shells like me are not to be in the bin.

Mind the world, turtles also win.


 


© 2016 Bala Gorthi



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This is playful & imaginative! I like that! It feels a little self-deprecating, but also self-accepting. It's exactly where I've finally gotten to in my 60 years. I used to do everything quickly, talk fast & much, pack a ton of activities into every day. Now I'm disabled, so I had to learn to slow down. It was very hard for me, the first few years. Now I'm in a totally comfortable groove where my body & my mind are slow, but I have my routine figured out to work perfectly with my rhythms. Your structured and sporadic rhymes make this feel playful, too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie for your appreciation. You have caught it right, this written in a playful mood jus.. read more
Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie for your appreciation. You have caught it right, this was written in a playful mood.. read more



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I love the last line of this poem. This is an empowering write. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you Michael, for reading and and appreciating.
This is playful & imaginative! I like that! It feels a little self-deprecating, but also self-accepting. It's exactly where I've finally gotten to in my 60 years. I used to do everything quickly, talk fast & much, pack a ton of activities into every day. Now I'm disabled, so I had to learn to slow down. It was very hard for me, the first few years. Now I'm in a totally comfortable groove where my body & my mind are slow, but I have my routine figured out to work perfectly with my rhythms. Your structured and sporadic rhymes make this feel playful, too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie for your appreciation. You have caught it right, this written in a playful mood jus.. read more
Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie for your appreciation. You have caught it right, this was written in a playful mood.. read more
"Mind the world, turtles also win."

Such beautiful and wonderful thought. Should be scripted and carved for the future. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your beautiful review. :-):-):-)
oh!! this is full of wisdom...
The words rhyming and the sentences screaming of reality... wow...
nice one, as you've included moralities along with the strength of a turtle...
yes... nothing is impossible...
Anindita : )

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Anindita, for this wonderful review :-) :-)
I don't rush things, but I'am not to slow. I guess that's where I want to be, I enjoyed your well penned write. Eva

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you for review Eva. I find myself I little behind whether using technology, riding or driving... read more
Slow and easy wins the race! Some people are in too much of a rush in this world. I liked your poem. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Sometimes, I feel like that one. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
agree with Doodley...in a couple spots the rhyme drew too much attention to itself...but the concept is so spot on...slow isn't always a bad thing...especially when our pace is consistent..like someone who bounces off of bad things with a protective shell, keeps trudging along...we will eventually get where we want to go...those in such a hurry for instant gratification will often get sidetracked so often...they lose the race to real contentment.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your kind review.
I am going to work on the point you mentioned about this poem. .. read more
It shows that those who are slow and are ridiculed go through this sort of pain which is amazingly expressed by your poetry. What I like the most is you are challenging the world that you are going to win.
you showed the pain suffered by weak souls very neatly.
Slow and steady wins the race ! That is the fact of life.
Very nicely written :-) :-)
keep writing and thanks for sharing :-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thanks Gorthi for your review. And thanks for acknowledging my view.
Your reviews always enco.. read more
I like your idea here.......

A little raging cry for the slow types of the world, like your turtle. In this fast-paced world, sometimes the slower types are left behind. However life is not a race. It is a journey. It is not the speed that matters. It is the length of time that one can maintain the momentum. And like the tale illustrated, the tortoise can win.

I enjoyed your idea here, and it is nicely executed. Perhaps a couple of your rhyming words do not quite fit the piece. They leave the reader a little confused as to your meaning.
Otherwise, an interesting idea. Well thought out.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the kind review.
These days, things happen very fast. Sometimes a person riding.. read more

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