The Fakir loses

Come to me, the fakir calls again.
Saying there is nothing to gain.

Your soul is a dove.
Allow it to fly above.

And there is a pain.
Your plight is in vain.

Come, witness the infinite.
The world is to write.

Hey, don’t fall into the abyss.
Just cling to the bliss.


I say:
I’m still a lamb.
A little dumb but not so numb.

And there is a bond.
Of which I am so fond.

Pain and pleasures are my treasures.
I love getting these earthly seizures.

Your infinite is trite.
I love to fight.

My love is my zenith.
Many things it holds beneath.

The zenith seals the abyss
And the fakir waits in his bliss.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love it when a piece of writing teaches me . . . I didn't know what a fakir was until I looked it up! I also love the facing off between fakir & lamb . . . this symbolizes (to me) how a wise older person may try to offer wisdom to the youthful person, but the lamb will always have to learn its own lessons in its own way. That's why it might be better to lead by example, rather than to preach to younger people . . . anyhow, your rhyming is sophisticated (rather than simple) which I enjoy! (((HUGS)))

[Bala Gorthi]

These days we don't find real fakirs. The sages and monks wear robes and they all follow their own school of thoughts and they do not move freely in public. And are not available to all. Fakirs are my favourites because they are very simple, easily accessible( though we find them easily now) and they live their wisdom. No attachment, no hatred, no bindings, no luggage,no ego and they live like beggars.
So I prefer referring to Fakirs rather than saints, sages or monks. Even if we say 'the enlightened' the ego factor becomes evident. So for me it is Fakir. In heart I feel like a Fakira and A Suguna but the mundane has to be lived , our dues have to be paid the loving ones have to be cared with due attention and love. It is always the lamb that is driving me to look worldly and keeps me going. My Fakir has to wait till I finish my job here..... Then one day there may be a spiritual odyssey?...
Thank you for reading into this poem. I always look forward to your enlightened reviews on my work.
Keep visiting....:-):-):-):-)

[barleygirl]

Always love reading your extended explanations . . . thanks for taking the time (((HUGS))) . . . I know exactly what you mean about "ego" creeping into the teaching of some wise people.

[Bala Gorthi]

You are welcome, Margie.....

[wander girl]

wow!!!!
great use of rhyming
another good work from your side
welldone!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you reading and appreciating.. Keep visiting.

[Lorry]

Sometimes we just have to walk our own path in life, and learn those lessons ourselves. The fakir's wisdom can only be offered, but for it to hold any true value, we must first live it and learn why it was so wise in the first place. Wonderfully captured essence of life, relatable to all of us who have made our own mistakes and learned from them.

[Bala Gorthi]

Very true, you have wonderfully summed it up. Thank you for reading and appreciating this write..

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The words hold a lot to learn from. Thanks for sharing such a work!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for visiting and reviewing...

[Paul Bell]

I take it Fakirs in India are like saints in Britain.
Hiding in hope of a new dawn.
Though who knows, the lamb may become the Fakir one day.

[Bala Gorthi]

Yes, it is bound to become the Fakir one day. As of now it is enjoying the bondage in the name of love. You will find this lamb in my other poem "Lost in the Labyrinth."
Thanks for reading into the poem well. Keep reading.

[Nwang]

This is pretty good. Kudos to you. Good poem. Reminds me a bit of Tagore.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Nwang for reading my work and reviewing. Welcome to my writing domain.
Keep reading . Keep giving your valuable feedback.

[ManasaC]

Very interesting. Glad to have read it!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for reviewing.
Keep reading .

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You know, i came back from India in August, and i didnt see one Fakir in all my time there!

Your poem has a very mystical quality about it. I like the idea of the cunning Fakir trying to influence and deceive the innocent lamb with his tricks and false promises.

"Pain and pleasures are my treasures".......a great line and very good rhyme!

Your writing is progressing very well. Keep them coming!

[Bala Gorthi]

The times have changed Doodley. You will not find real fakirs in societies. The fake ones pushed them oblivion. The fakirs were saintly people without any materialism. They lived on only alms. Today, the real fakirs prefer to live under a veil. May be , they pass in the society as normal human beings earning their own bread.
Thank you for reading and appreciating. My fakir is not going to give up on this lamb. Some day he will come again with some new idea.
Thanks for reading and encouraging.:-):-)

[Manu]

A very unique and nice write :-)
I loved this conversation between the Fakir and Lamb.
Especially, last two lines...very well played with words
The zenith seals the abyss
And the fakir waits in his bliss.

I clearly remember my teacher's line, he used to say that you can take a horse to the river but you cannot make it drink..

You cannot force anyone to do things until they are convinced.
Fakir's persistence and lamb's consistence was really fun to read.
And your lamb series continues...
Keep writing the lamb series, I would like to see more of your poetry on this.

I had a good read, Bala.. :-) :-)

[Bala Gorthi]

I am glad you enjoyed the conversation. And you will definitely have some more of the lamb series.read moreI am glad you enjoyed the conversation. And you will definitely have some more of the lamb series.
Both fakir and lamb are very dear to me so they will be featuring in my work time to time. Thanks for noticing them.
Thanks for this Nicely worded review.
Keep reading and reviewing.

[EvaThornburn]

Very entertaining. A pleasure to read. Happy you chose to share this wonderful write. Can't wait to read more of your poems. Eva

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Eva, for reading and appreciating. :-)