The Break up

The Break up

A Poem by Bala Gorthi

Today I came out and so heartlessly you surrounded me
You pricked with that harsh touch and made me flee
Those warm hugs seem to me like a matter of past
How can I bear your changed persona till the last
Can't love this new you.Oh Hello,Who are you?
When people saw your new avatar around
They all changed their guards abound
No one here seems to mind but I do...
I can't live with one who can turn so cold
You look like a stranger in wet blanket bold
I never thought our relation would end like this..
Your cruel touch overwrites those days of bliss
The embrace that sizzled me once holds no longer
I shall take refuge in the arms of my warm comforter
Let's BREAK UP for now till you meet me in another form
Oh my winter, we can renew our bond once you turn warm..

© 2016 Bala Gorthi



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This is one of the best poems of yours that I've read so far! I love this. I can totally relate to the dislike of the cold & dark season of winter, plus the way this represents people who "go cold" on me suddenly without explanation. Your rhyming works well with many sensory observations well-expressed. I love the "new avatar" line, which is a nice modern twist on old man winter (as we call him sometimes)! (((HUGS)))

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you Margie for all that appreciation.. The inspiration came from the cold morning breeze which.. read more
barleygirl

10 Months Ago

I also never wear a jacket or coat. Even when it's around 0*C, I still wear only a sweatshirt & shoe.. read more



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It's dark, truly it is.....and I got the feelings here as I have passed through it.It seems to be difficult but we can move on.
Thank you Bala for sharing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

7 Months Ago

The beauty of poetry is, it can have many dimensions. I like your take on this. Thank you surya for .. read more
A very interesting concept and personification of winter. Thanks for participating in my contest.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

The pleasure is mine.. Thank you for visiting and appreciating.
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Gee
I'm with you on this Bala, I hate the cold, winter is a right bind, and I work outside. Very well written with a good rhyming scheme. Well done that poet

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

The winter gives me many reasons to dislike it. I am glad that there are others with me on in this d.. read more
Gee

9 Months Ago

You are most welcome
Nice rhyming plus your talent of showing up the main theme at the end is quite interesting...

Posted 9 Months Ago


Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Wander girl for visiting and appreciating..
Wow....Brilliant. I really enjoyed reading it. Good Job!

Posted 10 Months Ago


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Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you for visiting and appreciating....
I don't know about you but your poem is resalable. I love your imagination on breakup particularly i love metaphor that you have used in this poem. Thanks for composing and sharing such nice poem.
Best
Szhzia

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you for visiting Szhzia! That was for the season... In life, I think breaking up is the most p.. read more
SZHZIA

9 Months Ago

It was my pleasure to read and review your writings. you are welcome. I agree with you but why it ha.. read more
This is a brilliant piece. Nicely done.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you, T.S.Sky, for visiting and appreciating.....
T.S. Sky

10 Months Ago

You're welcome.
Wow, Bala..
Though i like cold weather a lot i do understand your perspective.Your encounter with the winter is summed up beautifully through this write. And the title has quite amused me...i really love the way you bring that punch at the ending.
This writing also has a subtle linking of those cold relationships that breaks you from the core.
Very nice :-) :-)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Manasvini, for your understanding of this write.. Welcome back to Wc after..... is it two.. read more
I agree with BG....this is your most poetic write yet!

Your rhythm and flow is very consistent and the rhyme is getting better with every poem you write. Very well done, Bala.

There are many of us that can relate to this theme; the end of a relationship. You have given the reader a thorough grounding of the emotions that such an occasion invokes. A very fine piece of writing.

Posted 10 Months Ago


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Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much, Doodley for those appreciative words.. All credit goes to the kind words of gui.. read more
When a warm relationship suddenly turns cold, it seldom reverts back to the original warmth. The emotional pain is strong in this one, Bala. Lydi**

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you very much for your visit and appreciation..

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