Goodbye

Words of a depressed soul

Something is burning
Mind has gone blank
Feeling fumes
In those hairy veins.

A group totally engrossed

Watching a sport

I hear their voice.       
Where am I?
What's the purpose?
It feels so itchy.
Should I leave now?
I hold no value.
Nothing holds value.
Mood says goodbye.

Suddenly, someone knocks
with million dreams in eyes
needing a guidance.
I say, no meaning man
Just go away.
It’s my pack up time.
I hear some noise
Boys jubilate in the yonder
In celebration of a victory
What Victory?
Again those Itchy edges
In my mind.
Mood says goodbye.

But then, through the window I see
An old sick man of neighborhood
Fetching some fruits for his wife
He is fighting so hard in his life.
From here, I scream.
All no meaning

Don’t you get tired?
Why are you pushing so hard?
Just bid a goodbye

But behind those pale eyes

I saw his love for life

Living for someone                      

Grand salute and

Kudos to you old man

I hold no art and

Add no value to life
My mind is useless
Let's swap our bodies
Serve your need
This useless soul in a useful body
Swap it, man.

I go, goodbye

 

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

A life without meaning om the one hand tries to make sense of those who find myriad reasons to live and even the old man who has but one reason to live.
Sources of inspiration abound - all around - but like a hardened sponge the speaker cannot absorb any longer due to the despression.
Sad but relatable Bala.
Well penned.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Tony, for visiting and appreciating.
The worst part of the depression is, its strong clutch over the person.For some, it may take years to come back to celebrate life and its value. I was just trying to show how they feel and the things.

[Tony Jordan]

I'm familiar with depression Bala.
I felt this write. You wrote it as it is.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you. I am glad you felt it.

[JustaGurl]

I hold no art and
Add no value to life
My mind is useless
Let's swap our bodies
Serve your need
This useless soul in a useful body

seriously amazing lines, no words..

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for visiting one of close to heart works and appreciating it. Keep visiting.:-):-)

[Sasha]

Loved it a lot. Very deep and sad. Thanks for sharing.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you, Sasha for your visit and appreciation...
Keep visiting..

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A very melancholic poem......

You have written a very realistic piece, applicable and identiable to many. Of the life that is lived, yet has no value and no urge to live life for all its glory.

Your poem is very poignant and relevant and flows extremely well; slowly prodding the reader as it tells its tale with sadness and a tinge of hope.

A very well written piece, Bala.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Doodley, for these words of appreciation.
I am glad that this write is well received.
I have seen depression very closely. We feel like running away from them. They carry such a gloomy aura, no smile, no spark in their eyes. It is just sadness and anguish in their eyes. I just wanted to show how they feel and see about the things that happen around them. Thank you for the visit.

[Norman 223]

It's extremely difficult for someone like myself, who has never experienced true depression to understand the hopeless and negative feelings of those that are suffering in this way. We can sympathise, but not relate.
So much of the writing on this site is a reflection of this condition, which is probably a "reaching out" for understanding.
I admire your skill Bala in making this meaningful attempt to show these barriers from a sufferer's point of view, in that they equally cannot accept the idea of optimism. Thank you.
Norman

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Sir, for kind words of appreciation. I totally agree with your point and perspective on this write.

[whyamihere]

this is so cleverly written to describe depression. I love it and look forward to reading more of your works

[Bala Gorthi]

I am glad you liked it. Thanks for visiting this write. Welcome to my writing domain...

[barleygirl]

This is a message of brilliance. This could've been written for a friendship I have with a younger poet who doesn't have a strong will to live & he's got good reasons for feeling as bleak as he does. This almost describes our friendship, with me pushing thru my life challenges & trying to find a way to inspire him by doing so (but not being preachy). It's very original of you to come up with this string of ideas, but it's also very relatable & realistic, the way some young people may wish to let me have their more healthy & functional bodies, becuz I have the will to live & they don't. This is the kind of harsh honesty that makes for the best writing. No judgment, just describing the ironies & contrasts of life with great imagination! (((HUGS)))

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Margie, for visiting and appreciating. There is not much one can do for the one in depression. Even if we listen to them with an understanding nod that is sufficient. But what they go through silently is just unimaginable for a normal healthy person. They see a dark gloom on bright days. This is the only tribute I can give them, a statement of understanding of their pain and acknowledging them and their pain as it is. That sad resigning look in their eyes is something that haunts me and makes me pray silently wishing them some special person or event with special light and shine into their life. Some anti depressants will definitely help them but I know they won't be ready even for consultation. So we have to wait for them to overcome it.

[Surya]

A depressed one, I could say, And a hidden message i felt here about the life that if i have nothing to do i have to quit, And living our life for someone, as old man is worthy than being depressed soul.
An inspirational piece of write.
And thank you Bala for sharing.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Surya, for visiting and appreciating.
I appreciate you kind words, you got it rightly that's how a depressed man feels.
But I am not saying that we have to quit if we have nothing to contribute because I am one who feels that we have no right to take way life even if it is ours. This write is about a man in depression. It feels like this when one goes through depression. It is a phase in people's life after failures, in illness and some other situations. Some anti depressants and counselling can help a person come out of this phase quickly otherwise some people may take years.
I have compassion towards them because they go through a lot silently and no one understands their inner fight.

[Surya]

Hope you do good for them.And it's my pleasure to read.

[mercy party]

to not feel value. the poem could make a reader either want to get out and stand up or just as easily slink off. Well, i valued your poem. it was nice.

[Bala Gorthi]

This is how they feel.this is a depressed person's voice. No logic applies there. So I have not ended on a happy note. I have seen people in depression and how they look at others. Some mood elevators and counselling may help them.
Thank you for visiting and sharing your view.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Depressing thoughts.
We have been there at some point of life.
I love the thought behind this poem.
The old man trudging along is a fine example. Love makes us go on.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Haiderji, for visiting and enjoying the write. You are absolutely right. Love makes us go on.