The Journey

A prayer of the soul treading on the unknown

 

This petty soul,

Treading alone and bare hands on a path unknown
For there is no mystery in journeying on the known
Many seekers left oceans of knowledge to guide
But not to follow any is the adamant soul's decide

But it is between you and me, I have my fears now
Faith is the only guard I have, watch me from above
I know you are in and around me ever ready to hold
But why is this silly freaking soul so shaking my bold?

Let not the thirst and hunger make me fall or fail
Let not spikes of the tiring path put the rail to derail
Don’t test me in my testing times that are to come
Be my guide and reach me safely at my destined home

 

 

 

Reviews

[Manu]

I absolutely love this, B :-)
Faith on that magical creator is precious belief in itself. As I always say...we come alone in this world and go alone from this world but the journey between these two end points decides how and where our next end points (life and death) will be...I love my quote, B ;-) :-p :-D
This soul conversation between you and your almighty has evoked a sense of real quest within me.
Peace and cheers to you.
Respect. Brilliantly put :-)

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Manu, for the visit and the appreciation. Thank you for endorsing the faith factor.
Dear, I know very well how much you love your work and that quote. I remember that blog post of yours. We share a common belief in this regard. Why don't you share that write on the writers cafe. Just a suggestion!
Thank you for your continuous support.keep supporting.

[Manu]

I shared a bit of it on my profile info. I can't share more than this. It is safe somewhere on my blog page. :-)

[Abhilash Hegde]

Beauty!!! Written flawlessly and it engulfed me in a sea of thoughts! Some great wise words here. These lines worth a mention:
"Many seekers left oceans of knowledge to guide
But not to follow any is the adamant soul's decide"
We all journey our lives to search to find the truth and essence of life in our own ways.. aint it?
Loved reading this one. Thanks for sharing!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Abhilash, for your visit and words. I am glad you liked my favorite lines in this work. Keep visiting...

[Hebe]

It's always hard to follow the spiritual path, and you poem expresses the struggle incredibly well....wonderful piece.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for your visit and appreciation, Hebe.

[Surya]

A heartful journey to pass....
Thank you Bala for sharing...:)

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for visiting and appreciating, Surya..

[Lydia Shutter]

Your spirituality shines in this well written poem, Bala. Good rhyming. Lydi**

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for your visit and appreciation Lydia..

[An owl on the moon]

This is a beautiful longing for the vision and the hope to seek that place of your soul's desire; to seek your home. And if this journey is shared, it is a difficult place to yield to another's pace and path as well.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for your enlightening review. Your visit and words are greatly appreciated.

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A conversational prayer between the poet and her Creator.

A very personal piece that muses on the unknown that lies ahead as one journey's through life; with the poet seeking wisdom and guidance through this jagged pathway into the future.

One small correction....try not to use abbreviated words such as "Coz", it detracts from the poetic quality of a piece. Poetry is words. Words are language. Always keep your words full and poetically consistent.

Other than that, this is a very intimate write; written with heart on the sleeve and faith in the soul. Nicely done, Bala.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for the visit and appreciation.
When we choose an unconventional and totally new path, at some point confidence shakes and fears start creeping in and then a prayer comes out.

And, thank you for the correction. I have noted the point in mind and edited in the text. Your inputs are always valuable to me.
Keep visiting.:-):-)

[barleygirl]

I always prefer a conversation with God that sounds exactly like we might speak to a friend. I love the way you are presenting your likes & dislikes evenly, not asking for a specific outcome, but just having a lasting spirit friend to share all the things that cross your mind, without filtering, just being your true self in front of your true God.

[Bala Gorthi]

I loved the words a lasting spirit friend. My concept of God is different. I don't keep on a high pedestal and worship timely. My God goes and lives with me with and in my every breath. So the talk with him goes on like chat with friend.
Thank you for visiting and seeing this write the way it is and encouraging me with your words.

[barleygirl]

I think of God as the best possible friend one could have, always at my side . . . helps us forgive mere humans for their inability to be as good a friend as we might sometimes prefer (((HUGS)))

[Michael S]

Amazingly inspiring poem..I hope the path that you tread on be the one that you want. Hope difficulties won't stop you from going ahead.
Great poem

[Bala Gorthi]

I hope so. Thank you Michael, for the visit and your continuous support.

[mercy party]

a great and reflective poem. Aside from the strong introspective on faith, i saw it as one individuals struggle to not be so picked apart but to just be loved and helped. solid poem!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you mercy party, for the visit and kind words.
I appreciate it.