Broken Bricks

Broken Bricks

A Poem by Bala Gorthi
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A saga of broken heart

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She fondly cherished every inch of it
Treasured those sweet memories every bit
That love, fights, miseries and joys they lived
Precious pearls of memories their ocean shelved


A cyclone of treachery nourished by the selfish
Shattered the pieces of kindred bond to blemish
Jewels of bonds burgled by their motives so petty
Her heart suffered a mighty pain yelling for their pity

The helpless soul watching her kin in a war of greed
Grabbing alluring mundane vanities spoiling the creed
Gathering shattered pieces of heart, so ruthlessly shelled
The poor soul soulfully mourned the loss and her eyes welled


She can never get her sweet home back
It's kind of irremediable agonizing shock


© 2017 Bala Gorthi



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This is an intense & compelling message becuz you write with image-packed word choices and action-packed verbs. I've read a billion end-of-love poems here & yours is very unique & original. I love the way you make this into a palpable whole, the complete story of what end-of-love can mean. It's so much more encompassing than having a broken heart. You've shown us here how a love failure can disrupt everything in a family's lives, with far-reaching difficult results. So well written! (((HUGS)))

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

6 Months Ago

Thank you Margie, for visiting and appreciating. I am glad you have read this one. You rightly broug.. read more



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This is an intense & compelling message becuz you write with image-packed word choices and action-packed verbs. I've read a billion end-of-love poems here & yours is very unique & original. I love the way you make this into a palpable whole, the complete story of what end-of-love can mean. It's so much more encompassing than having a broken heart. You've shown us here how a love failure can disrupt everything in a family's lives, with far-reaching difficult results. So well written! (((HUGS)))

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

6 Months Ago

Thank you Margie, for visiting and appreciating. I am glad you have read this one. You rightly broug.. read more
"She can never get her sweet home back
It's kind of irremediable agonizing shock"

This is a heart touching write.
Sometimes, memories are what we hold on to even though the trust is broken..
Good work 👍

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

It is not easy to erase the memories Yumnakay, especially those connected with our home and childho.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

I completely agree.
You're welcome! It was a pleasure reading your work 😊
Very heart wrenching....The deepest of the relationships often face the worst of the circumstances. Its the way of God to prove their love to the rest of the world...I think.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

Thank you for visiting and sharing your view
Powerful and sad situation described.
"The helpless soul watching her kin in a war of greed
Grabbing alluring mundane vanities spoiling the creed
Gathering shattered pieces of heart, so ruthlessly shelled
The poor soul soulfully mourned the loss and her eyes welled"
The above lines make us know. Life can be very hard and very scary. Thank you Bala for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote




Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your visit and appreciation, Coyote.
Coyote Poetry

9 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Once trust is gone, the house of love tumbles and can not be rebuilt. Families are often torn apart due to treachery and selfishness. It's horribly sad. Memories remain and often they are rosy, but reality reflects the truth. Powerful poetry. Lydi**

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much for this appreciation, Lydia :-)
Well structured poem..had a nice read :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


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Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you Aishwarya, for visiting and appreciating.
A lovely metaphorical write on the aches of a damaged and irreparable relationship.

Some lovely vocabulary and imagery used throughout to illustrate the depths of sorrow and heart ache. Like many people have written before: the heart is a home. And to have it burgled and bludgeoned is a soul shattering experience.

A well written piece, Bala. Broken bricks can always be repaired, and the heart will consolidate and beat once again. Nice work.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago



Thank you Doodley, for your visit and the appreciation.
You are right, the h.. read more
home can still be a state of mind. There can be reconciliation. This was a truly warm poem and i must say it felt brave. good!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you Mercy party, for your visit and words. You are right. The reconciliation can heal the wou.. read more
Selfishness and greed breaks at the foundation of a home.
People who are meant to be each others strength end up weakening the other.
The result is a broken heart and a broken family.
Very well expressed.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Very rightly said Sir. The result is broken a heart and a broken family. Thank you for your precious.. read more
I loved every bit of this lovely heart wrenching saga of a broken heart, B :-). You are my idol when it comes to this kind of poetry. Very sublime and this one speaks to you evoking a reaction from readers .
I can feel the essence of this write. When trust gets broken by the ones whom we love and respect a lot...it breaks our roots...home- this word is one of the beautiful words that we have...A home without family is just a structure made of bricks. Lovely title- broken bricks..signifying a broken family.
As always very very good.
Brilliant :-) :-)


Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

10 Months Ago

Thank you Manu, for this uplifting review.
Home is the most beautiful and comforting word in.. read more

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