A Hypocrite Laments

A Hypocrite Laments

A Poem by Bala Gorthi
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Experimental piece in villanelle form

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A hypocrite covers my fragile core
My delicate image not to be unfold
So this tender heart closes the door

Boiling deep inside is a boisterous shore
But my lacrimal lakes are on a mighty hold
A hypocrite covers my fragile core

A tide of rage piercing every inner pore
If I open, the floods will kill you cold
So this tender heart closes the door

Deep inside my wounds yell a tragic lore
The misery I endure can never be told
A hypocrite covers my fragile  core

The stoic guise I have to hold a little more
Showing a hardened ace with a deceptive fold
So this tender heart closes the door

 I know the weakest closes the door
But entire life I carried an image of bold
A hypocrite covers my fragile core
So this tender heart closes the door


© 2017 Bala Gorthi



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I am often not impressed by this form becuz the repeated lines come across as a little too mechanical for me (following the form, more than expressing a logical sequence of ideas). On the other hand, the repetition in your poem was needed for me, becuz your message felt a little deep & cryptic, so it was good to get certain lines again, giving me a chance to re-think what is meant by this. All in all, a thought-provoking poem, but I just don't get the idea of hypocrisy from this. I do like this line: "a hypocrite covers my fragile core" as an original way to suggest that hypocrisy is done to protect oneself, oftentimes.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie, for visiting and reviewing this write. I understand what you mean by idea of hypoc.. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

Thank you for sharing that idea about using words in a different light. Now I'm provoked to re-think.. read more



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A deep and powerful write. To look into your heart and your soul. We can find the things we dislike. Hard to be strong at all times. I believe we are not hypocrites. Just was overcome with some tasks. Thank you Bala for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


Very deep and thought provoking poem, I'm also not usually a fan of the repetition but it added a much needed effect to this and tied the whole thing together!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Bala Gorthi

6 Months Ago

Thank you for your visit and precious comments. Sorry for responding this late as I have been inacti.. read more
I am often not impressed by this form becuz the repeated lines come across as a little too mechanical for me (following the form, more than expressing a logical sequence of ideas). On the other hand, the repetition in your poem was needed for me, becuz your message felt a little deep & cryptic, so it was good to get certain lines again, giving me a chance to re-think what is meant by this. All in all, a thought-provoking poem, but I just don't get the idea of hypocrisy from this. I do like this line: "a hypocrite covers my fragile core" as an original way to suggest that hypocrisy is done to protect oneself, oftentimes.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you Margie, for visiting and reviewing this write. I understand what you mean by idea of hypoc.. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

Thank you for sharing that idea about using words in a different light. Now I'm provoked to re-think.. read more
This is an amazingly penned poem.
Especially loved these lines:
A tide of rage piercing every inner pore
If I open, the floods will kill you cold
So this tender heart closes the door

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for your precious visit and appreciation. Keep visiting Long Wispers.
Beautiful..Beautiful writing..
Good concept. I loved this work. I could relate to this thought.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much for your kind visit and precious words, Michael. I am glad that you find it rela.. read more
Villanelle's now huh? Havent you come a long way in a short time!

While only vaguely being knowledgeable on this type of poetry, it seems to me you have managed to keep to the format quite well.

Your piece is very engaging, well worded as always, and exudes a quiet menace and inner rage.

Congrats on attempting a very difficult form of poetry. Well done, Bala.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Yes, for a while she has left. Busy with her studies. She may come back after a few months.
Doodley

1 Year Ago

I see. I hope she returns. Like yourself, she is becoming a very good poet. Thanks for answering my .. read more
Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

She is a lot better than me. I get very amazed to find how different we both are despite the fact th.. read more
I'd be a hypocrite if I said I wasn't a hypocrite but I'm not a hypocrite...is that hypocritical of me?

I like the way you've arranged the words around this framework. You chose a strong refrain which makes those lines sparkle like a gemstone in the spotlight.
Nicely done Bala.
:)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Well, I don't want contradict your first statement, Tony. You seem to fall in my category because .. read more
This is the first time I've come across this kind of poem. I don't think I've ever even heard of it. So I found it very interesting.
I think most people are actually hypocrites of themselves. I know for a fact I'm one. I think a lot of peole hide their innerself.
I liked this verse the most:

"Deep inside my wounds yell a tragic lore
The misery I endure can never be told
A hypocrite covers my fragile core"

I guess I find it relatable.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your visit and finding it interesting.
I am also one such person carrying a bo.. read more
well done bala, i find it challenging to write to form.
you've done so beautifully

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your visit and very encouraging review. Keep visiting.
Beautifully penned. It is not always easy to write a villanalle

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your precious time and appreciation..

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