Pain

Sometimes in our life no matter how hard we work to get something we don't get the desired results...........

When i woke up today morning
found i got rid of the physical pain from last night
but had a strange pain today instead
causing fear to face the world
forcing me to stay in the bed.


And i wonder where did i go wrong
going down and out
my fake smile kills this pain momentarily
but it would again sprout.


Don't have enough left now
to keep myself up
been fighting with troubles from the first day
with the time's gallop.


When i thought i would shine
when i thought i would leave behind others and go high
i am facing my nightmares in real
thats making me sad
and here I cry.


I was different from the rest
the world goes the way wind flows
I went the otherway around
took so many blows.


Nobody can help me out
thats my curious case
no choices were made wrong
but can't help the look of disgust on my face.


You have been playing with me
God get out of this insanity
Its been a testing time for me
putting questions on my vanity.


Now i m losing my dearest friend named hope
I m holding her hand in mine
she is taking her last breath
and the life tastes like brine


and this loss is piercing my heart
stings my very being,so hard
this bug named Pain
has moulded me into a bard.


But everybody wants happiness
nobody wants pain,
but you can`t have a rainbow
without a little rain...


So why should I cry
I will laugh,I will pretend
I am still alive
and will eventually reach my destiny in the end.

Reviews

[Aella.lives]

It's not a bad write, I agree with G!o though, so many writers have expressed themselves in a similar way. Try creating new metaphors that haven't been discovered. However I do admire your writing, great job!

[Marie]

Sometimes, when there's nothing left, you have to invent something...

[G!o]

More of like a song or story type, i liked it though. It's a bit shallow try revise it and put more weight to it. Let the words and imagery try break down the reader. That's what makes a poem that people will read over and over. Still thumbs up, you did write something of your own originality.