OH MY LOVE

Oh My love
When I am without you
I am like a writer without any word
I am like a poet without any imagery
I am like a song that nobody heard.

Oh My love
When I am without you
I am like a body without a soul
I am like a painting without any colour
I am like a human without any goal.

Oh My love
When I am without you
I am like a forest without any trees
I am like a planet with no star
I am like a honeycomb without any bees.

Oh my love
When I am without you
I am like a voice without any sound
I am like a secret that nobody keeps
I am like a thing once lost,never found.

Oh my love
When I am without you
I am like a warrior much too afraid to fight
I am like a bird without his wings
I am like a day without a night.

Oh My love
When I am without you
I am like a cloud that will never rain
I am like a word with no meaning
I am like a foodcrop with no grain.

May you always remember one thing
What little that I can give
I will give it all to you
Your my one true love.

And I am nothing without you
So I surrender myself to you
give me the privilege of being yours
I will always love you in all ways
and I will never run away from these chores.

Reviews

[Manpreet]

Cute poem!

[G!o]

Nice poem Balkaran...i love the comparison and i find it lovely though the last stanza i feel like it is something we read a lot thus sounds sort of so ordinary...you know what makes a poem interesting is when you read something that you were not expecting...it adds the thrill...but in general this is a lovely poem...

[Alex ExtremEnigma]

very good , nice poem

[Weiron]

i think you pretty much covered all the tangible parameters, honestly expressed and
nicely written, one thing distracts me from the flow and imagery and it is the last word "chores" i mean, call me crazy but, i don't know any woman who would consider your respect for her to be a chore...if you can find a sweeter word or a whole sentence it would, in my humble opinion, deliver the "gotcha" much more easily and with more meaning and flow....i love this poem

[Marie]

I think using the word "chores" gives the poem a piquant flavor. Though Dr. Wood may be right. It might be best to leave the last verse off entirely. And rework the second to last something like this: May you always remember one thing/all I have I give to you/ for without you there is nothing to give.

[Balkaran Singh Sidhu]

ya perhaps i ll have to rework some things....thanx for the review

[MOON]

Good write lyrical.

[Balkaran Singh Sidhu]

thanx moon

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think it lets itself down a bit at the end..it seems a bit forced..otherwise I quite enjoyed it

[Balkaran Singh Sidhu]

perhaps a bit.....ll update it..thanx

[Steven Cash]

Oh My Dear by Tenth Avenue North

that's what this reminds me of

AMAZING write

[Balkaran Singh Sidhu]

thanx