Follow Me...

this song is about a friend that tries to convince his other friend to trust in him and follow him the way in life, he also tries to tell him about the life and what is bad and good in the life. hope u will enjoy it :D:D

Follow Me...

take my hand and follow me

to the farthest place that can be

a shelter upon our dreams of future

to prevent our pain and torture

 

take my hand and follow my way

in that place forever we'll stay

away from peoples' eyes

where anything good will die

 

follow me to a better place

follow me to a better way

listen to what your heart says

feel the ecstacy of the golden ray

before the chance fade away

oh! before the chance fade away

 

take my hand accross the sea

climb up, up the trees

try to dry your running tears

they show up your childish fears

 

take my hand towards the sand

we can build hand in hand

against our enemies we will stand

nothing can stop us on this land

 

follow me to a better place

follow me to a better way

listen to what your heart says

feel the ecstacy of the golden ray

before the chance fade away

oh! before the chance fade away

 

 

Author's Note

i wish u enjoyed my song, i am just a beginner so don't be harsh on your comments......thanks, i appreciate it :D:D

Reviews

[deeps]

I really enjoyed your write
I like it I'd like to hear the music to it

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This was really a nice attempt :)
The structure was very appealing and lucid but I guess you should work more upon the language and the flow.
Since, the language was not that much appealing and the flow was forceful (according to me)
But overall, a great piece of writing..would love to read more of you.

[Minnow]

You're a very good wirter. You could probably post a video of yourself playing the song on video then put it on your profile.

[Quiet Waters Rise]

I thought it was great and a wonderful tribute to your friend as well.

[Encore]

It's very good!
Sorry, but I can't ignore your grammar issues, it's my thing to notice. Is the lack of capitalization intended, or just that you rushed and didn't notice? Either way, good job!