Contempt

A little review about a part of my life.

Contempt

 

No matter what I did,

You said "You're doing it all wrong."

No matter what I tried,

You said "You're not good enough."

No matter how hard I tried,

You said "You're not worth it."

 

I improved myself, but

You said "You're doing it all wrong."

I was the best in my field, but

You said "You're not good enough."

I told you "Please help me to be better"

You said "You're not worth it."

 

I lost my self-respect.

I doubted myself.

I became depressed.

I wanted to give up.

 

I changed my life.

I left you.

I met people who accepted me,

Who gave me the courage.

 

Today, I know:

 

I did everything better than you.

Your drive was envy.

I could outdo you.

Your motivation was fear.

I had the chance to be respected.

Your incentive was hatred.

 

You tried to destroy me.

But my will is stronger than you.

 

Today, I am what I can be.

I think back to my time with you,

but you are not worth it.

All that I feel for you

 

is

 

contempt

Author's Note

It's my first try. I would be pleased to get helpful and honest reviews! I'm not a native speaker...all hints about grammar, spelling errors and awkward language are very important for me

Reviews

[jvava]

Very good!
I like the structure of this poem. It gives it a sort of personality.
Not once did I think you could've rephrased something because it was awkward. Your writing flows well!
Grammar is good, spelling is fine.
Fantastic write and stellar read! Keep up the great work!

[penny]

Thank you very much jvava for your wonderful and helpful review. Your praise encourage me to keep on writing.

[ocean_side]

For someone who's not a poet, you do pretty well as one. No errors I can see. Your topic flows well throughout the work.

[Kay]

This is common among us humans. Giving up because someone said "you can't." Excellent poem. Your grammar is wonderful considering you are learning English. I enjoyed reading this. Write some more, dude.

[penny]

Thank you very much Kay! I'm glad you like my poem and you enjoyed reading it. That really means a lot to me!!! And I'll try to write more like this. Hey, you're a great motivator ;). I like it!

[♥ Kinnixk]

Sehr gut! It's very good for your first try, I'm very impressed :)

[penny]

Thank you very much. Your review means a lot to me! You encourage me to keep on writing.