Possession II

An edited version of the first one i did.

Lost in the agonizing ecstasy

Surrendering to her bittersweet pleasure,

Having complete control over me

My mind, my heart, and my soul.

 

Something has taken over me

As I wonder what I've become,

An animal or a free-spirited soul

Soaring on butterfly wings.

 

She found me before it was too late,

Knowing I have survived,

In the violent battleground

Of this chaotic world.

 

Her loyal disciple,

As I dissemble my soul

Or getting caught in the webs

Of my own imagination and dreams.

 

My soul bleeds for her,

And I'm within her control

Possessed and bound

To her loving chains, and I cannot escape.

 

Walking in the wilderness of my mind

As I get lost in my own creativity.

I am addicted,

And there's no point in an intervention.

 

I am nothing without her,

My muse, my love

Calming my raging storms,

And I am possessed.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Michael X]

rayne, beautiful spellcasting effects, your words accentuate a magical mystique, which holds the reader
in a glittering daze, the concept is depthfully sweeping in meaning, to capture the pinncle inspiration,
what could be more encouraged? the heightened imagery takes the heart to another place and time,
incredible ammount of thought put into every consuming word, many favorite lines, i could not chose one,
to know possession, to be overwhelmed by desire's sensual grace, exceptional expression, well done.

[Rosary]

Great Vocabulary Very Good Flow and Very Descriptive. I like the emotion and yearning in this poem

[Robert Luna]

Very hypnotic flow of words and visuals you leave me breathless and at a lost for words. I love the flow of this as it carried like air in a breeze. Sorry took me a while to get to this. Lost my modem Thurs night and was not able to really do anything online until now. I liked the feeling of desiring to understand something you know you will never be able to no matter how hard you try. Battling both the inner demon as well as dealing with the fact of the reality of being placed in a place of almost wanting to blame yourself in some twisted way even though you know you are not to blame in the least. Very interesting thoughts this places in my mind and such a pleasure to allow to consume them.


Great Job!!!!!!

[WritefromtheHeart]

WOW! This is amazing...I haven't read the first one, but this is excellent. You have it bad!! Or it sound like it from this couple of lines ;-)

I am addicted,

And there's no point in an intervention.

[Phil Sanders]

Excellent writing .......