Trying to Find A Dream Within This Nightmare

Trying to Find A Dream Within This Nightmare

A Poem by Beautifully Tragic xPoetry Queen

Wake me up,

Before it all falls apart.

Trying to find a way
To mend this broken heart.

 

The sun and the moon

Have started a war within my head.

Attempting to be the peacemaker of it all

But my soul's been torn to shreds.

 

Echoes in the mist of the night

I can hear all my demons scream

Shadows moving across the walls

When all I want is to live in a dream.

 

This nightmare is never-ending,

Bugs crawling upon my skin.

The monsters of my dark reality,

I refuse to let them win.

 

I'm burning in the fire

Pushing myself through all the pain.

Dark clouds always following close

Pouring down their acid rain.

 

I'm learning to embrace the silence,

It's the only way I can heal.

Wrapped in a shell of my own cliches

Nothing can change the way I feel.

 

Writing my heart out to the world,

Just trying to clear some air

Desperately searching for something more

A dream within this nightmare.

 

 

© 2011 Beautifully Tragic xPoetry Queen


Author's Note

Beautifully Tragic xPoetry Queen
Written at the dentist. As much as I hate writing rhyming poems, I think I'm pleased with this one.

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Very well-written. I liked the rhyming ^-^ It's very cool that you can come up with such art just sitting waiting at the dentist!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem's flow sure has a way to hit someone when they read this. The imagery is sinister in my opinion but don't we all try sometimes to seek the better in our dreams? After all, we see things others can't and create our own imagination during those ours. A heart felt poem for sure.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I love this piece as well. The rhyming scheme is solid and the theme is well mapped out. The line:"Pouring down like acid rain" means a something to me since I spent a bunch of my formative years in California. So, I know acid rain very well. I also loved the imagery you evoked too. Good poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Rhyme scheme is nice...though I would tweek the last stanza because nightmare doesn't fit in the end and extends the punchline...there are ways, play with it a little It's ok to change things around a bit...the imagery is superb, really nice poem....just one more thing in the last stanza if you take out the "AS I" it actually allows nightmare to fit fluidly...just a thought.. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


A amazing poem. I like the questions raised by the poem and the strong statements. Hard to know where we stand and what to feel sometime.
"I'm burning in the fire
Pushing myself through all the pain.
Dark clouds always following close
Pouring down their acid rain."
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


brillaint write along with a brilliant rhythmic pattern!


Posted 12 Years Ago


The words all flow together and you used excellant rhymes.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This a a great poem....you rhyme really well..I can tell x

Posted 12 Years Ago


Looking at the title I thought it would be an interesting read. And it didn't disappoint me. Powerful and touching. Nice poem. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow this is beautiful I under stood every word. It is an amazing poem and I plove it

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Passionate kisses of a mind gone wild, NJ



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