Bleed Me A Melody

"Radio, bleed me a melody. That'll make this boy cry." - He Is We - Radio

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She turns up her radio, tears fall down from her eyes

The boy is sitting there, alone he cries

The lyrics bleed out, all over their skin

Turning red, the lines are crooked and thin

He sings along, to every broken melody played

And each one of their emotions, drastically frayed

Her voice is weak, at its breaking peak

The sorrow leaks through as the song speaks

Far too late to save them both, the words will bleed

Right out of their hearts, aching lonely-hunger to feed

They sit there and cry, the radio will sing their song

It won't even tell them, to show them they're wrong

The radio bleeds out their melody, through the ink of their souls

Despite all the misfits, the wrong-doings, the scarred holes

The lyrics are so meaningful, so beautiful, so right

Both boy and girl let those words shine bright

So radio bleed the melody, the melody of their hearts

Even if both of them are missing needed parts

Let the song end, now they shall dry their eyes

No longer will they see those ugly lies

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Author's Note

Hmm. I like how this turned out.

Reviews

[Matthew Smith]

Nice! It's rare to see rhyming poems on WC written with a measure of skill, vocabulary, and mostly-appropriate layouts. And, well, even then many such poems will only tell a story, or a bit of action/reaction. Here, you managed to describe the feeling involved with a song.

Nice theme, too. The idea of the song was a good idea! It would've been lacking, imo, if it'd only been a bantering of emotions between two down-struck individuals. There are enough of those on WC.

[Stefano Ianiro]

Good piece. You make it very easy for the reader to envision this situation and what exactly both parties are feeling. Everybody has a song to associate with a loved one, and we all can relate how strong that feeling can be when it's played.

[Ace D Portgas]

Cram you have no idea how many pages I had to go through to find this XD...That deserves some credit

Poem first-off was sad and heartfelt...You can just see the boy and girl crying while listening to the radio...It's emotional and I actually love the title because it fits so well

As for the style I LOVED the rhyming and flow of it while I reading. The wordplay was good I liked the line "The radio bleeds out their melody, through the ink of their souls"

Overall a nice poem and you can see why I started reviewing poems cause of people like you lol

Keep it up!

[Tate Morgan]

The metaphor of music as the life runs out is beautiful

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This is so good, I like the rhyme scheme.
So nicely written.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Skillful and predonic, a fierce mind works the pen here, well done, a great read.

[Q.Kennedy]

this is lovely.

[rwar ish me]

I love this :o, its very good

[J Todd Underhill]

You are not the only one who likes how this piece has turned out. I too am blessed to have read your well crafted work. impecable rhyming make this piece shine!

[Kesha]

Wow this is absolutely amazing! I love this, def going in my library! :D