Night Terror

A nightmare real or imaginary?

His leer burns through my harried soul

Sobs wrack my body

I quake with fear

Long talonlike nails over sweat soaked skin

A gasp escapes

From deep within

Lungs of my own cease their frenzied dance

A heaviness rests

Atop my heaving chest

My body as still stone unable to move

My flesh crawling

Itching beneath the demons gaze

A scream all my own my eyes open wide

An empty room awaits

No creatures within

As i lay down to sleep and close my eyes

A voice enters my head

Or was it always inside?

"Be still my child and keep closed those eyes

Follow me down through the dark

To the madness inside".

Author's Note

please comment and review honestly and I shall return the favour.

Reviews

[Brian D. Roth]

I love it, BeeBev, it's so wonderful and yet so unsettling. Your visceral imagery and word choices are worthy of great, clever craftsmanship and talent via a gifted poet, thus lending the poem a kind of texture that sinks down into your soul and resonates in the oddest, most unforgettable ways.
Thank you so much for sharing.

[ImSJ]

Very nice. Or rather not nice? Imaginative. I hope you're sleeping better these days.

[BeeBev]

Thank you for you comments.

[Bhumika Devkota]

Really well written. The image it gives the reader is really interesting.

[BeeBev]

Thanks for reading.

[Warren Daniel II]

Really enjoyed the word choice and the way your words paint a very vivid picture. An awesome read, you should write on more dark themes.

[BeeBev]

Thank you for your kind words I love writing dark material just lack confidence with poetry at the moment.

[Warren Daniel II]

I share the same problem when it comes to poetry, haven't posted any poetry yet but plan on doing so really soon. I would suggest you write more dark poetry when you feel as if your at your worst, you might just be surprised

[Rocans]

This is definitely up my alley. Very visual and emotionally provocative. There is an air of darkness in this that appeals to me. Well penned overall.

[BeeBev]

Thank you very much

[David S. Patch]

Your work is very descriptive. The imagery is visceral as well as psychological. I can relate a little, having had nights when I couldn't sleep. I had a fear, which you evoke well in this piece. My favorite part of this piece is the very end. It seems dark on one hand, but bright on the other, because it suggests to me, as if God is inviting you in. He reigns over darkness and light, so he knows both equally well. Nicely done.

[Chris]

I think the deepest darkness is our own perception of what IS within our mind at any given moment.

[BeeBev]

Yes i agree thanks for reading.

[A. Amos]

Poetry read and felt like you’re watching a thriller...great write

[BeeBev]

Thank you for taking the time to read my work.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my friend...

[Project Mayhem]

Ooooh. I love dark poems like this. Well done. I visualized this entire poem like a story

[BeeBev]

Thank you very much glad you liked it.

[Project Mayhem]

No problem. would you like to review mine? Polynomial Pain

[BeeBev]

Yes of course.