Condensation

Condensation

A Poem by Sarai Akscyn
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In memory

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Before you, I thought I was safe
all tucked and swaddled inside the cocoon.

 

Before you, I didn't cry for an hour
     dancing for two just to track back over again.

 

In the after of you, I'm left wanting for
     the yesterdays of this funeral for friends.

 

In the after of you, I dropped my skin.
     and tossed it out with the rest of the lies.

 

In the morrow of you, I'm knowing now
     there's no safe place.      There never was. 
 


© 2009 Sarai Akscyn



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In the after of you, I dropped my skin.
and tossed it with the rest of the lies. Very strong lines.

Jason would love this. He was a very fine person & I communicated with him often.
It sickens me that someone so passionate and bright has gone away. He would
be honored by your tribute. A great consoling hug to you.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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What a tragic ending. Although, we saw it coming with the back track after 2am dancing... nothing is safe, but we must trudge forward endlessly hopefully - helpless as we are, we wouldn't be safe anywhere really would we?

and beyond the bristles of dead skin, new life waits anew.

Posted 8 Years Ago


you're not safe, he was a hoax.

Your tribute is stunningly beautiful - much like you.



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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

In the after of you, I dropped my skin.
and tossed it with the rest of the lies. Very strong lines.

Jason would love this. He was a very fine person & I communicated with him often.
It sickens me that someone so passionate and bright has gone away. He would
be honored by your tribute. A great consoling hug to you.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stunning and fitting tribute for a worthy man

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

simple, straightforward, vulnerable, real...i don't think you can ask a poem to be more than that, or if you do it becomes artifice...ed

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Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is an excellent tribute piece. I like the continuity of linear time portrayed in the write as well.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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