Only human

I've never written a poem that doesnt rhyme so please any advise would be great. thanks xxx

Only Human

 

A riding wave, a gentle breeze,

Never stopping,

Ever changing,

 

Changing tempo, direction, tune,

Never stopping,

Always pushing,

 

The goal ever the same,

always so

The path,

Wave,

Instrument,

Always changing,

 

We feel helpless when in control,

And that we are,

Helpless,

Lost,

 

The tempo speeds up and we panic,

It slows and we fade

Hopeless,

Daydreamers,

 

We're lost in our own world,

Unable to relish life,

For fear of death,

 

A wave, a breeze, a song we dont like,

We run away in fear,

No thought of consequence,

Or even a chance to admire,

 

Our only excuse, so petty,

                 This is life,

                  We

                        Are

                              Only

                                        Human....

 

Only human.....

 

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Author's Note

any advice would be great, im not to good with spelling so theres bound to be a few mistakes there. sorry xxx

Reviews

[wordwarrior]

Very thoughtfully penned. Your words are concise and your intent and thoughts in clear. Yes we are pften afraid of stretching ourselves for fear of many things. We all need to search and try to discobver that spiritual freedom.
Well done!

[BiroPen]

Thank you for your kind words x

[amdc101]

The goal ever the same...

That stanza is the only part I disn't like because I felt like some of the flow was lost, but other than that, it was a great poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

This is amazing poetry. I like the artwork and the flow of thoughts in your words. I had to read the poem a second time for pleasure. A perfect ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

I really enjoyed reading this piece. I love free verse, there are no real rules to it. In my opinion rhyming is over rated. Would love to see more of this. :)