When i look around

When I look around
 
Looking around makes me sad
More sad then ever
I see the smiles
And the hands in twined together
Looking around and you can´t miss
Miss everyone sharing a kiss
Looking around
It makes me wonder
If those people trust one another
I stop looking around
And look within me
I wonder if you even trust me
I need to stop looking
And stop to wonder
Because I can only hope
We love and trust
Trust one another

Author's Note

from when i was 13, and wrote it for a friend, for my beloved yas!

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

You were a champion, a great writer
even at 13.
More you have some indefinable quality
which just comes across as very lovable.
----- Eagle Cruagh

[ShameemAkhtar]

Really like the poem. And love your ending where you give up thinking when you realize you can but hope.

Maturity much beyond the 13 years you were then,...

:)

[Elmy Khalaf]

'I stop looking around
And look within me
I wonder if you even trust me'

Wow, I like that very much. We humans spend expend so much on surfaces, afraid to stop and look inside.

[Dove]

wow this is beautiful, and you wrote it when you were 13... another wow. And i love the ending

[Linear]

Sweet words of wonder an awakening of the bud, as it grows into a beautiful flower

Entwined

Enjoyed, thank you :0)

[BrynnaW.]

A very beautiful poem! I really enjoyed reading it and you such a good job on it. Very good job and keep on writing!

[Coyote Poetry]

Trust is hard to earn and to keep. A good friend you can trust with secrets and they will be there when you need them. A nice poem with a hopeful feel to the words. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very sweet, and gosh I couldn't dream of writing like this when I was 13!!!! Excellent indeed, shows feelings and emotions I lacked at that age lolz :)