I'm Overcome

What runs through my head in sing-song way when all the love in my heart surfaces sometimes.

I'm overcome

with a little girl's emotions

so much joy

so much fear

so much crazed deranged devotion

to a boy

who I met

in the middle of the road

he hugged me 

I said hi

he told me never leave his side

just one look

was all it took

the love war then began

my heart beat

my heart wept

my heart soon devised a plan

was he mine

did he lie

my thoughts ran a little wild

on that night

under moonlight

I was yours

and you were mine

we fast forward through time

oh the love

oh the danger

oh the bliss within our crime

from our souls

to our minds

where we're now at in life

still I can't

hide my feelings

like a little girl's emotions

I'm overcome

Author's Note

Not sure what I did here, so if you have an answer to my mind, I'm gladly looking forward to the answer ^_~ It just spilled out, when I was thinking of when I first fell in love.

Reviews

[The Jay]

I usually do not read pieces that strike me as corny and really emotional, but this is amazing. The raw nature of it, the repetition, the flow, the words, fabulous.

[Serenity Faith]

thanks so much Jay! ^_^ I never have been any good at writing love poems, so this is as good as it gets at the moment.

[Barbara Walker]

Free form writing can produce some amazing pieces, as this writing shows! just letting your thoughts, feelings and emotions flow from your heart to your pen! Great write!

[Serenity Faith]

Thank you very much ^_^ that's exactly how I wrote it!

[Kent Smotherman]

Well it spilled out into a very beautifully expressed piece! It's very raw, very honest in its expression. Excellent write.

[Serenity Faith]

Thank you very much! I'm not very good at writing love poems for some reason. So i figure it's best to just write what comes into my mind when that feeling surfaces. ^_^

[Skye]

AWWW this is sweet. ^_^ It flows so well, i'm amazed at how you can string your words together so flawlessly. And of course, the pic is adorable!