Step it up

Step it up

Give me a hand

Help me run this town

Lets make this grand

 

Stand beside me

Speak words of wisdom

This is not the time

To shut up and stay mum

 

Scream your heart out

Go with your gut

Walk the extra mile

Lets try to make the cut

 

Theres nothing we cant do

Once we decide, it's done

No matter what the obstacle may be

Be the sniper with a gun

 

Challenge yourself

Do things you'd never do

Rise up to the occasion

Chances like these are far and few

 

Bravery is an act

Not just an honorable medal

It's a do or die situation

And for second best we wont settle..

Reviews

[Revolved]

This is amazing. The way you wrote each stanza with it's rhyme, it's wonderful! It was all written well and the last line was quite my favorite :D

[not your typical girl]

i really liked the first stanza!
the rhyming wasn't perfect ... wisdom and mum... done and gun just didnt flow either.
however, i truly liked the encouraging yet rebellious feel of this piece

[Kelley]

very encouraging poem I loved it!

[The Water Queen]

Challenge yourself
Do things you'd never do
Rise up to the occasion
Chances like these are far and few

This one and this other stanza stood out to me

Bravery is an act
Not just an honorable medal
Its a do or die situation
And for second best we wont settle..

Great poem

--The Angel of the Earth--

[Poet's World]

Bravery is an act
Not just an honorable medal
Its a do or die situation
And for second best we wont settle..

i liked these lines much.... a strict and stiff poem.. nice

[Therene]

Your love of music and film is evident even at the first line. :D

To answer your question, I would not be as grand as you would be. You sound as if you're ready to rule the world(in which maybe one day you would. :D Just sayin'.) Maybe the best I can do is give out what I'm capable of giving, not to the extent of wearing myself off with too much pressure. There is no way I can handle a gun as a sniper, I'd be trembling. Yes, I see the randomness in stringing your thoughts. :) That's what made it interesting. It does look clunky and choppy BUT it works. Technicals, I think
"Stand besides me"
-...beside...

If I got that wrong, my bad. :))

Good job!

[Rachel U.]

Firstly, you're lacking quite a few apostraphes. They are your friends, I do so swear it. ; )
Your partial rhyme here was nice (so few people do it), albeit simple and using a bit of poetic license. "Wisdom" and "mum" were difficult for me to make fit, because the swing in my voice naturally goes up on "wisdom" but flat on "mum".
The flow here is fairly natural throughout, but a couple of lines rudely threw me out without so much as an apology for being necessary:
//No matter what the obstacle may be,//
//Chances like these are far and few// (this line I could "make fit", but only by speeding it up)
Otherwise, I liked your theme and organization. Well done.
9.5/10

[Coyote Poetry]

You sound like a Army training class. I believe we need to do our best always. I like the feel of the poem. Like a motivating speech to get you butt in gear. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[cest la vie]

Yes indeed.. step up to the plate and swing that bat..
well formed thoughts and you did a fine job here:-)

[deeps]

This is a very well written write here. I liked this alot.
Wonderful rhyme scheme!