I Dare You

I Dare You

A Poem by Devyani
"

Am bored and so I decided to post something I'd written earlier

"

I dare you to move

And leave me alone again

In a place of agony

Where nothing remains sane

 

 

I dare you to breakaway

And place the blame on me

Why did you say you loved me

If we weren't meant to be

 

 

I dare you to break my heart

And shatter it bit by bit

Don't act as if you were the flame

That brightened my life when it lit

 

 

I dare you to say

You were my everything

No matter how good it was

It wasn't worth the pain you bring

 

 

I dare you to come back

And reclaim what you think is righfully yours

You broke my heart too many times

And now I can't seem to find any cures


© 2010 Devyani



Author's Note

Devyani
Full credit for the picture goes to the artist http://www.flickr.com/photos/woolloomooloosky/199033572/ :)

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When I see that title, the Shinedown song pops into my head. I had to get rid of it before I could review this. Then of course you open with that line and I get a Switchfoot song. GAH

Once I got past that, I actually enjoyed this quite a bit. You seem to do well with simple, straight-forward to-the-point poetry. I like it. You missed an apostrophe at the end in can't though.

I wouldn't give it a medal, but I wouldn't change a thing. Good job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very emotional write. It flowed well and your choice of words were perfect. A great piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


B'ful write. The pain n the sadness has well been portrayed. U are a natural... :))

Posted 7 Years Ago


You wrote this poem when you are …
Deeply hurt by someone…..
You have put your emotions….
In an authentic way…..
That reader can feel the pain and fury….
In your mind……
And your sincerity and commitment…to the relationships….you value most…
Very nice….


Posted 7 Years Ago


Nice poem. Well written and well . . . written. It's too short for a thorough description, leaving the reader to interpet much. Albeit it's another poem about broken hearts (something we all relate to), it still makes for a good read.

Thoguht there is little that makes it stand out from most of the peoms I read dealing with this subject, the "I dare you" repetition was a nice touch.

Posted 7 Years Ago


this one of my favorite thing I've read on this site so far keep writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


Your words are so vivid and honest, filled with a depth pain and the bitterness that rises from distance. Powerfully written!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I agree with coyote Poetry on this.
This is a well expressed and written write here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

When we threaten and complain. Still something left. Best to walk away and leave it as a good memory or bad. A excellent poem. You can tell a story. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

nice poem again ..though seems to go wid d same thing ..monotony....
liked d image though!... nice ..

Posted 7 Years Ago



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