I'd wish away the pain

I'd wish away the pain

A Poem by Devyani
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Inspired by a random status I wrote a while back "But if I could wish upon a star today, I'd wish away the pain" ..

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It's not easy, expecting an apology
Afterall I said I was stronger without one
Why do I then want you to say it once
Am I that scared to lose you?

I don't think its ever an ego
But I do think it's always an insecurity
To rush into things and to rush out of them
That's who I am and yet you don't understand me

Punch me in the face
And it just might hurt less
I can forego what you said
But how can I forego what I felt?

The world moves on without me
And the rush hour continues with you
Is it just me or are you also losing yourself
In the morbid milling crowd?

A lie can cover a thousand truths
And I have professed the biggest lie
"It's all fine" and a customary smile
Are all that keep my facade up

But if I could wish upon a star today,
I'd wish away the pain
Becuase the world around me silently crumbles
As I wait with bated breaths for things to change

© 2011 Devyani



Author's Note

Devyani
Basically this is about overlapping complexities of a relationship.. It can be interpreted as something between friends, people who love each other, or even plain ol' foes... !!

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Random indeed, but the lesson within it is immense. Many do overlook the fact that relationship is not as smooth as silk always. They always expect smooth runs and most time its not what they get. Your expression all through this carried enough weight and it made vivid what you want to put through to us. Thank you!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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The emotion you've conveyed with your poem is extremely intense. Its a familiar sort of feeling, but you've expressed it through your words perfectly. I love the last line.. ' As I wait with bated breaths for things to change' Great job!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A poem of hope and sadness. Many people are wishing upon stars to be with someone or in a different place. A excellent story in the poem. A outstanding poem. I like the ending. Made the poem complete.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


im sharing dis coz i loved dis .. it mite juz b situational kinda thing but den n i loved ur work as olwz! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


There are many ways to interpret it and it is just how you want to interpret it. Great job

Posted 6 Years Ago


I think that this is good and that you really talk about the problem.
I also think that you get the reader invloved in the what you are writing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is a realy deep peace of work. Good job nd keep writing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


The poem is plain beautiful and also very realistic as it deals with the problems of insecurity, love and pain, which I'm sure all of us are very familiar with.
'I can forego what you said
But how can I forego what I felt?'
These are my favourite lines.
Nice poem, keep writing. :)


Posted 6 Years Ago


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"Punch me in the face.....And it just might hurt less....I can forego what you said
But how can I forego what I felt?"....... really liked d whole poem nd specially these lines..... g8 piece.... simple bt clearly conveying the msg.....

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow…
Wonderful…
Touching…..
Evoked a soft pain….in the inner recesses of my mind


Posted 6 Years Ago


I don't think its ever an ego
But I do think it's always an insecurity
To rush into things and to rush out of them
That's who I am and yet you don't understand me

There is a lot of truth in the above verse. Who knows why some inspires a safe relationship while others only insecurity? This was a pleasure to read.

Posted 6 Years Ago



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