Losing out

Losing out

A Poem by Devyani
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What are you losing out on?

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losing out on patience
losing out on time
losing out on friendship
losing out on a dime

losing out on opportunities
losing out on hatred
losing out on happiness
losing out on tears shed

losing out on comedy
losing out on shrewdness
losing out on inheritance
losing out on the obvious

losing out on hassles
losing out on love
losing out on optimism
losing out on all the above

© 2012 Devyani



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Strangely great. The last line is amazingly profound in reference to the preceding verses. It's short, relatively simple and straight to the point.

I sense a bitter regret within the confines of this writing.

I really enjoyed this poem, Milady! :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Lyrical with quick jabs of emotion. This poem has powerful imagery and comes from
a poet who has the gift of songwriting. The repetition comes across in a violent manner
and forces the reader to feel the loss as they are hit over and over. The use of emotion
is superb.

Posted 4 Years Ago


its sad when you have lost the thing you loved the most.. without any fault of your own

Posted 4 Years Ago


I'm normally not a fan of repetitiveness but i quiet enjoyed this, it was sad yet had a certain truth and relativity to it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


losing out on everything..
losing out on infinity...

Strong.

Posted 4 Years Ago


a beautiful piece... I really enjoyed it. The rhyme scheme was nice.

Posted 5 Years Ago


so true for so many, a well penned piece, honest and true! thanks for sharing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


I hate losing out on things. Experience is life's greatest pleasure, and it is never good to miss out on anything. Nice write =]

Posted 5 Years Ago


Nice flow of thoughts in this poem. Not a positive poem. Sometime it feel like all we do is wrong. Good to stop and find a better road to be upon. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago



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