You Could Be With Me

Lyrics to one of my songs.

I know you're sick, but so am I
Love sickness makes me wanna die
When you feel the pain that begins to start
I love you so much i can feel it in my heart

You could be with me
but you leave me dying

If you were home, and this I won't force
I'd get to see you at the golf course
Better than nothing is getting old me
Cause you don't seem to care and that's honesty

You could be with me
but you leave me dying

You choose to stay alone at your grandma's house
Instead of being home doing your F*****G schoolwork
This emancipation scheme will not ever work
You're not even trying
I'm not even rhyming
-properly
mentally
capacity
Overloading
Swelling my mind so fast
I can't breathe
I can't write
I can't see
What is my future holding for me?
..Absolutely nothing...

You could be with me
but you leave me dying

Every time you hang out with your friends, which I don't have one
You could be with me and we could have fun
Instead of leaving me broke and alone
Come spend the night out with me in my home
Maybe that way we could be so equally happy
and evenly
nervous
But how could we be
if we don't have a purpose?
I'm going insane just sitting alone
While you're out having fun at Jen's home

You could be with me
but you leave me dying

Author's Note

To hear the song go to www.myspace.com/drowningLyourLmother

Reviews

[Leanne Conway]

I love this.

[Bee]

hmm... is one part a rap?? I write songs too and I notice the measures of the stanzas aren't consistent (so I thought it's a rap. XD) this song have "mph!" if you know what I mean. There's this eminem vibe I'm feeling... this is dark, but at the same time sad because I know the feeling of loneliness.. :P

"Maybe that way we could be so equally happy
and evenly
nervous
But how could we be
if we don't have a purpose?"

ah, my fave part -- I like this concept. Freedom. Oblivion. Just be happy with each other's company and don't care about the rest...
keep on writing :)

[HorrorMaster]

Best song ever dude. :D

[Erin]

It's definitely got the attributes of a song. It's a great piece -- dark, depressing, poetic, kind of scary but in a good way. I enjoyed this piece a lot. Good job.
Keep writing! I think it would be good to read more from you.
PBP