Heartbreak - Theme 2

Another poem from my 50 Themes project.

Once I thought we were eternal,

Shooting stars surfing the sky,

Aiming for a golden horizon,

That embraced us in love's warm arms.

What broke this softly woven dream and shot us down?

You Vanished.

I lost all feeling, and gained all feeling.

I lost joy and discovered sadness,

True deep sorrow, alone in impermeable darkness,

Crying to no-one, a shattered heart.

It's razor edges created scars no-one could see,

Desperate and confused,

In a new world I didn't understand.

I lost compassion, but found rage

Filled with an acidic spite, I spat venomous words,

Focused, obsessing, just you, only you,

Wanting your soul to be as raw as mine,

But only damaging myself.

I lost a friend and discovered longing,

There was no-one else but you, nothing else,

An aching pain, soothed only by golden tinted memories of you,

But distorted, hazy, confusing,

The blackness replaced by a blinding silver mist.

A purgatory of confusion and longing,

Made from leftover love with darkened edges.

You were my greatest prize and my biggest mistake,

I tried to fill the void you left,

With fake love, new regimes, false promises,

Trying to replace that which was forever lost.

I loved you, loathed you, learned from you,

You broke my heart but I mended it,

You enriched my past but I'm creating my future.

I am stronger, my heart no longer some tarnished ruby,

But the precious core of my being,

And I stare endlessly into a new dawn, a new horizon.

My hand is empty but outstretched,

Alone but not lonely,

Waiting for love

Author's Note

Based on true feelings, please review if you have the chance! X

Reviews

[Sally Hope]

This is the first break-up poem I've come across this website, which truly portrays just how crushing love-lost can be. Some of the lines are so powerful, that I had to read and re-read them before their full meaning hit home. If I had to pick my favourite line, I wouldn't be able to, because this is a piece of art, and upholding just a fraction of it will only stain it. Thank you so, so much for sharing this. I loved it.

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you so much for your awesome review, I'm so glad you liked it, it makes me really happy :DX

[Hope Rose]

Emotions are strong in this one... It's definitely a ride. Thank you for sharing this. Hope you are doing better, my friend. Keep up the writing, it's amazing.

~Small Town Hick

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you, I am that's very kind of you, thank you so much for taking the time to read x

[Hope Rose]

You are quite welcome, my friend. I am very glad I read this one

[Firebird]

Powerful...I feel your pain. Well written!

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you so much for your kind review :D X

[Ghost]

It is really good. You loved or still love someone. It really sounds special!

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you friend! X

[Insight "MH"]

My hand is empty but outstretched,
Alone but not lonely,
Waiting for love

This is an epic ending! I love how happy feelings when gone, are replaced with the opposite ones and vice versa, our hearts will still feel no matter what the situation becomes, we feel. Thank you for sharing this marvelous piece...... Insight.

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing hun, sorry it's taken a while to get back to you. Hope you're well :D

[Insight "MH"]

No worries my dear friend.

[nk36n37e]

I think my favorite line in this is, "Alone not Lonely" What a powerful line, and so much feeling behind it too. To be surrounded by people who know how you feel, but to feel no more comfort. To be shut off from everything outside the heartbreak, but to find a certain peace in it all. I'm not sure if that's what you were going for, but your poems always take me to the next level. Thanks!

-Noah

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you again hun, I always look forward to your reviews and comments :D

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

this poem reminded me of my past heartbreaks, i love it. it is full of emotion. i love it

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you darling x

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

your welcome, friend!!!!!! ;)

[Reshma]

Even I have went through this.....
Once you lose your love you end up in a mess from which you can never escape....
Even now accidently those memories creep in ,the void re-creates and the pain just consumes me .
Even now I analyze what went wrong 6 years ago that i lost it........
Life has moved on for me
I hope you will also be able to cop up with it and think about it as a remote incident in your life...
This poem ofcourse have struck the right chordes.. great work :)

[BlaqkShadow]

Thank you friend, I am well over it but remember the feelings as you say, because the memory of them lasts beyond the incident itself. Thank you for your review :D X