Cry

...just a reflection on my inner emotions...

She looks in the mirror and reminisces on the past,

Thinking of happenings prior to and during the year of last.

Looking at her face; her eyes- the windows to her soul,

Looking at the anger inside; heated as though it were coal.

She thinks of the joys that once existed,

Viewing the presence of family traits that aren't listed.

 

The mirror then cracksin two, leaving an obvious mark,

Straight down the middle; reflecting the light that no longer gives a bright spark.

Lonliness,anger, betrayal- leaving her volnurable for on-lookers to feast,

Releasing what you may call their inner beast.

One by one they come forth, ready to devour her,

To take her last breath as subtly as a cat's purr.

 

She stares at her reflection, trying to hold back the tears,

Tears which developed from bad experiences; now her fears.

She tortures herself inside, trying not to be a burden on others,

When she wants the attention, no one bothers.

She's forced to trust the ones that don't really care,

It seems she's going through more than she can bear.

 

Looking at her image, her emotions slwoly fall apart,

The emotions that have been played with; causing the freezing of her heart.

Love, anger,happiness; all in their prime,

Played with in one way or another, it should be a crime.

But little would you think goes through the mind of this young girl,

Feeling alone; volnurable; awkward, like a clamless pearl.

Someone needs to mend her heart before her emotions fully die,

Someone needs to remind her that it's alright to cry...

Reviews

[Jason]

Great peiece i feel like you went through all of the phases of emotions in this one, yet it was well put together so that it had a nice flow.
But to me this piece is more of a recovery piece, casue once we realize what is wrong then it becomes that much easier to change those things. That doesnt mean that we will forget about the wrong that was done to make us "CRY", but at least we know what to stay away from.



thanks.

[The DuchessPoet]

I like this piece!

Thank you for entering your talent in my contest!

[Carrie Montgomery]

wow...so much turmoil and pain.
"Viewing the presence of family traits that aren't listed"...this brought to mind the things we inherit from family that aren't seen in our eyes or skin color or how our hands look- it remined me of inherited "baggage" such as alcoholism, depression, abuse, etc. a very thought provoking line!
"She's forced to trust the ones that don't really care" people very often "trust" ones who don't care or those who are untrustworthy b/c they feel as though they aren't worthy of true love or freindship...another deep line!
"Someone needs to mend her heart before her emotions fully die,

Someone needs to remind her that it's alright to cry..." one can only heal oneself, love oneself fully and all else follows, I learned this the hard way! but it CERTAINLY IS okay to cry!
great write!

[Autumn Reign]

the last two lines are my favorite :)

[Rajive]

....Touching. Great use of metaphor charms, gets your point out, puts me in your shoes for the duration of the reading.

[Broken Warrior]

Insightful, great use of literary devices and touching. Beautiful creation once again charms, but i hope the time comes when you're able to creat such poems but preaching a time of smiling and not of tears :)

[Lyrical Love]

Your poem packs an emotional punch. Thanks, I enjoyed the flow of sadness through your tears.

[Amy Carrington]

....Wow. You are a very talented writer.