I Miss You

I miss your hug, your touch,    

   the way you look at my eyes,    

   your lips, the way it tastes,    

   and everything about you  

I missed all the times    

   we walked around carnivals    

   we had fun and just laughed    

   you kissed me as I blushed  

Now that you're gone    

   I walked places alone    

   waking up with no one    

   and needing you so bad  

I feel you're forgetting me,    

   all the memories the we built,    

   slowly, just like how you breathe    

   whenever you're asleep  

I hope that you still know    

   how much I love all of you    

   sinking is all I'm feeling    

   it's hard when I miss you 

Reviews

[Anjali]

Just as love and breakup are parts of a relationship similarly missing someone counts as a significant portion for expressing your love. No doubt your poem expresses the emotions beautifully.

[Coyote Poetry]

Memories and need. Become a part of us. I liked the thoughts and the honest tone of the poetry. Thank you Christian for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[CMC]

This poem exudes passion, and it's beautiful. We never want to miss that one person so much, and we never want to forget better times...it's almost tragic how time plays us for fools. Well-penned.

[wordman]

when you miss the one you love and you feel left out,just remember he probably feels the same

[Mitch]

Double check your verb tense here. Your first stanza has "I miss you" and your second has " I missed all the times". The first is present tense and the second is past. It's an easy fix. Also, I think you meant "all the memories that we built". It's a good write that conveys some great emotion, but it will flow better with some clean up.

[Surya]

Perfect in it's way. The pain of missing someone is shown up well...I liked it..:)