Cake!

Cake!

A Poem by Chris Lotus
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A flirty, humorous poetic piece, metaphorically portrayed through sweet treats

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This girl, she gives more love than I can take

Love to wake up every morning with her like pancakes

She's a very rare one, all bakers can't make

This one's heaven sent so I guess I'll call her Angel Cake

Or babycakes, because shes my baby, so nice and sweet

Or cupcake, because shes just right for me

Shes an all type cake, right flavor at the right time

Funnel cake at the fair, cheese cake at night time

 

Babygirl, you look so tasty

You never fail to amaze me

Youve got the sweetest kisses baby

I get a sugar rush of love, goin' crazy

 

Youre the only cake I want, the only one I adore

The other flavors are nasty and not as good as yours

Carrot Cake isnt sweet enough, thinking id get too flabby

Cant stand crab cakes because theyre just crabby

You're the best, my sweet one, the best all around cake

You're a special one, not just a plain pound cake

© 2013 Chris Lotus


Author's Note

Chris Lotus
Warrant's "Cherry Pie" kinda influenced this piece. Unlike the song however, this isnt meant to be sexually metaphoric.

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thats really creative ive never heard of someone doing that befor.
ur writing is excellent. you make it seem like it should never be a bore.
your doin really good. you aint makin it fake.
excellent job on ur poem cake1
it was great!
yah that was my epic fail at rapping! lol! fantastic poem!


Posted 12 Years Ago


Well, maybe she could be your surprise cake..Good one enjoyed reading..Sunflower

Posted 13 Years Ago


cute and humorous and inventive. Good job keep it up! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


lol this one definitely has some humor wrapped into it, but moreover the speaker's fascination with the subject (girl) is well expressed...good job

Posted 13 Years Ago


I thought this was cute and funny. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great to read. Well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great structure! Love it, very surreal! xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

aww!!
i loved the last stanza soooo much!
advice: re read to check for grammar errors in the beginning of the poem.

a very sweet piece though! really made me think ''awww'''

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very cute i liked it alot!:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aww that is adorable and catchy too!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 9, 2010
Last Updated on August 5, 2013
Tags: Cake, Dessert, Love, Flirty, Humor, Cheesecake, Pound Cake

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Chris Lotus
Chris Lotus

Lotus Island, Parts Unknown



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Hailing from the Mystic Cobalt Forest of Parts Unknown, I am the Wandering Blue Lotus Warrior!! I also go by Lotus, Chris Lotus, The Blue Lotus Dragon Warrior, Blue Dragon, the Wandering Blue Wolf, Ch.. more..

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