Cloud Nine Dreamer

The experience was amazing,

It was all she could think about,

Repeating like fresh memories in her brain.

 

The words spoke to her,

Lifted her heart like never before,

They kept replaying in her mind.

 

The body she was trapped in,

Still tingled with emotion,

Out of breathe but easily breathing.

 

The smile he displayed was contagious,

She too wore the smile to brighten people's day,

Nothing could bring her down,

'Cloud nine' had a constant resident.

 

When harsh reality hits,

The only thing keeping her sane,

Is the knowledge that when she wraps up warm in her bed sheets,

After the sun has sank from the sky,

Once again she can feel the way she did,

Her dreams taking over for another night.

 

Reviews

[Bertie]

A really sweet piece of writing !
I think you're good enough though to explore the idea further in a less obvious way...Sometimes the most significant part of poetry is not what is stated but what is not stated...
But I reiterate, a very lovely piece :)

[MoMo]

beautiful poem
ur a great poet :)

[Lori Carlson]

The whole poem has that dreamy feel to it, so it is an excellent ending that she will see this guy in her dreams and smile again.. great job!

[Tasha]

this was amazing. "her dreams taking over for another night"... i loved it. :)

[The old me]

great poem. great emotions shown.

[Helpless]

The words spoke to her,
Lifted her heart like never before,
They kept replaying in her mind.

The body she was trapped in,
Still tingled with emotion,
Out of breathe but easily breathing.

these two stanza really struck me, there is so much emotions in it. nicely done!

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

Even angels fall from the clouds, great poem.

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

This is amazing. You're a great poet Hannah. The structure and each and every stanza well thought about, well done :) x