Screw that

I wish to be wanted,

My thoughts, they are haunted,

Haunted by the truth,

The fact that I'll never have you.

 

Stupid is my game,

Only my feelings to blame,

I want to scream your name,

It is my little piece of shame.

 

Pathetic is the reason,

Darkness in this light season,

I want to grab your hand,

Make you fully understand.

 

I dont need to be loved,

Or so I say,

Screw that,

I want someone to fill the emptyness,

Night and day.

 

Another love song,

Damn I well I tried,

But in when I have a lovely rhythm,

My feelings I cannot hide.

Reviews

[Christopher Sal]

Rhythhhmmmmmm

[SabrinaThePoet]

i like this, i like the rhythm and the rhyming. great poem.

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

I love your rhyme scheme in this, Hannah! This piece flows brilliantly and captures strong emotion! Your plea for this person to understand you is evident, clear and strong...wonderful work = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

[Aidz]

Would make kewl lyrics to a song ...well done

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

i enjoyed this and really liked it, i liked how you wrote this part:
"Pathetic is the reason,
Darkness in this light season,"
last stanza this line doesn't seem to make since with the double I:
"Damn I well I tried,"

[BigDaddySiddle]

i felt moved by this, it's properly beaty too! xxxxxxxxxx

[TJ]

What a sad piece...unattainable love, crushes the heart

[Smokey]

Proper sweet....want some drugs?

[A Risen Heroine.]

Aww, I really like this write, it's so sweet :)
Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing.

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Tasha]

This was a great read. I loved the writing. Keep it up.