psychedelic

wrote this on valentine's while at my psych rotation at the hospital

My Psychotic Valentine.. Sad but Comic Valentine...

A Lover or two... could be a Voice or two... in this head of Mine...

and for my Manic Valentine I painted my Straightjacket Red...

they told me I should not... so I painted it with Love instead..

My Melancholic Valentine... shedding diamond tears..

Depressed with love .. and filled with so many Fears...

Roses Roses for my Obsessed Valentine.. Roses it needs

Roses more Roses... till cut by their thorns, My Valentine Bleeds...

Restless Days of My Anxious Valentine.. Panic at Night...

Breathlessness and Heartbeats race... at a Lover's sight..

Valentine my Multiple Personalities loved to live... Healthy or Ill...

it's been Valentine since ever I met them... and Valentine forever Still...

Reviews

[M]

I really love this poem because of the psychological progression it follows that makes it sound authentic, which is really hard to do for a piece like this. I would suggest changing "so much" to "so many" before fears in the 3rd stanza and "thorns" instead of "thrones" in stanza 4.

[GunMetal]

This came off very lyrical to me. It has a rhythm to it. Liked it very much.

[MoriartyMesa]

In some part's I saw a girl throwing a bottle at a wall, maybe burning her now 'ex bf' suits.

Than jumps to a sweetness with a gin bottle.

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting Valentine care. I like the use of language to make your final point. The ending made this poem complete. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[P.J.]

agreed, clever yet elegant work

[M]

No worries. Glad to help! :D

[EMF]

This is seriously wonderful. Loved every second of it. Funny, bright and clever. Terrific work

[Gomer LePoet]

A funny valentine, a sad smiling valentine, your lips to weak to speak, but volumes of words say you care.

[Khaled Hishma]

It reflects a personality that is sensitive, picky, and searching for true meaning of relationship.Anxious, restless,and worry are certainly what your mind concern is.Nice writing.