Her Last Words

Remember the last thing Spoken....

Her Last Words

Heartbroken as I nearly died for real,

Her heart cold, unfeeling without repeal.

I brought her the things she had asked,

Hiding my feelings taped and masked.

My home, our house together we shared,

Now another man's pleasure she cared.

For us, I was tossed away like the trash,

She was now happy with her man in stash.

As I walked out the door one final time,

I spoke from my heart the words sublime.

I said “I love you” as I was slowly leaving,

She replied “I love you too” in deceiving.

Then came the blow heavy in spoken thirds,

“Sorry, I didn't mean those last words”.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Good job of telling a relatable well-flowing story in a poem with strong rhyme & rhythm. It's like you're doing a character development using show instead of tell. Finally at the end, that one flippant line shows the true nature of this demon-woman without having to explain. Strong point made (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Bohrium Guy]

Thank you for your kind words and review.

[Kay]

Ouch. I definitely felt that final line there. Nicely written!

[Bohrium Guy]

Sadly it is a very true story... Thank you for the wonderful review.

~Rob~

[Kay]

Oh I'm so sorry to hear! Just know that you truly deserve better.

[Bohrium Guy]

One day.... its just a waiting game for the right one to come.