White Walk To Nowhere

White Walk To Nowhere

A Poem by Mark Witterick

The mist rises in front of me 
Strength failing: I falter,
stumble,
fall. 

Despite travelling so long,
My time grows short.
My watch has long stopped ticking,
Soon I shall imitate it with my heart.

The view could be worse I ponder,
My eyes have not yet shut down fully.
In front of them a journey I shan't complete.

In front an empty field lays just out of sight.
It's secrets hidden,
Below the powdered white.

It settles quietly in the dark.
Lovely view I think,
Just a little stark.

Natures signal is still in power.
Burying humanity with me,
Hour by hour.

Enveloped like the beach at high tide,
One last thought does cross my weary mind.
Who shall find me?
And what will they think?
Will they label me a failure?

A dumb fool on an impossible quest.
Or will they think me a hero,
For attempting this one true test.

Alas,
Tis not for me to decide.
So with one last drawn out sigh,
I settle myself comfortably down.
Quite ready to die.

Troubles forgotten,
My betrayer forgiven.
Love lost.
But no hatred transfigured.

© 2016 Mark Witterick



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Twenty views and not one comment... ridiculous! (If posts have more than twenty words, the effort is just too much i guess. Imagine it, Shakespeare would never have had success in today's mad market!)

' In front an empty field lays just out of sight.
It's secrets hidden,
Below the powdered white.

It settles quietly in the dark.
Lovely view I think,
Just a little stark. '

There's such a sadness in this, yet, in a way - a staring life straight in the face and noting how it is! Your stanzas vary, some more evasive, some more optimistic, some more.. more, than others. You've just laid your emotions and attitudes to them clearly for self and others to see. The end thought is far too final.. by displaying your mood or moods, you've dragged self into the limelight and, sorry, there's no escape, you're alive.

Fact of fiction, true or not.. this is such a worthy piece of writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mark Witterick

1 Year Ago

Thank you I really appreciate the time you have taken to write this and I love the positive feedback.. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

My absolute pleasure... however, i apologise for all the typos.. now edited, hopefully.



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Although this poem is a bit wordy, I found the rawness of it to be the total enjoyment of it.

I love the last line "but no hatred transfigured".

Like emmajoy below I am pd off at the amount of views with not one bothering to make a comment.

I have experienced this too, and had a mini rant on one of the forums about it.

People only want to read something two stanza's long, and even then, it's too hard to comment.

I enjoyed your poem, and thank you for sharing it!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Mark Witterick

8 Months Ago

HopeFloats thank you so much for your feedback I am glad you enjoyed my poem. Sorry if it appears to.. read more
Twenty views and not one comment... ridiculous! (If posts have more than twenty words, the effort is just too much i guess. Imagine it, Shakespeare would never have had success in today's mad market!)

' In front an empty field lays just out of sight.
It's secrets hidden,
Below the powdered white.

It settles quietly in the dark.
Lovely view I think,
Just a little stark. '

There's such a sadness in this, yet, in a way - a staring life straight in the face and noting how it is! Your stanzas vary, some more evasive, some more optimistic, some more.. more, than others. You've just laid your emotions and attitudes to them clearly for self and others to see. The end thought is far too final.. by displaying your mood or moods, you've dragged self into the limelight and, sorry, there's no escape, you're alive.

Fact of fiction, true or not.. this is such a worthy piece of writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mark Witterick

1 Year Ago

Thank you I really appreciate the time you have taken to write this and I love the positive feedback.. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

My absolute pleasure... however, i apologise for all the typos.. now edited, hopefully.

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