The Pauper McCarty

A poem about a night of fun

It was quite late in the fall

After a quiet ball

During the late night hours

With cocktail drinks and dancing

And many bachelors a-glancing

At pretty younger girls

And all their curls

That Madame L’eve

In all of her speed

Ran quite right into me

 

Now she didn’t see me

So I left her be

After a quick pardon me

But she let slip

In my pocket

A little note indeed

 

It was no bill fortunately

As I unwrapped it in my hand

But I found it much worse

So I let out a curse

For on it was scribbled a time and date

Requesting a me as a play mate

 

Tis a shame for a party so smashing

To end with this written lashing

To my entire good name and fortune

For I’m a man with the best taste

Who refrains from women so chaste

 

I laughed it off and smiled again

For this wasn’t the start or end

Many old widows and bachelorettes

Black, brown, blond and brunettes

Agree I am cursed as the greatest temptation

And what can I do with this expectation?

 

So they come year around

There isn’t a season my body surrounds

It belongs to all who seek it out

Like I was water…in a drought

 

Fortunately Madame L’eve

Didn’t spend her night with me

But the Duchess of France

Allured me with her trance

 

And there it is, my life’s story

Feeding off not fame or glory

But of the rich women at a dull party

And that’s me, the Pauper McCarty

 

Author's Note

I am a younger writer and am still, as is everyone, seeking much needed help; critiquing and constructive criticisms will be noted and greatly appreciated

Reviews

[The Winter Grey]

To be a novice, you possess a considerable talent, I wouldn't have pegged you for a beginner. I enjoyed the use of language in this piece, I felt as if I had stepped into eighteenth century England. By the end of the poem, I really felt acquainted with this character, this "Pauper of McCarty." So on top of penning a classy, entertaining poem, you also show considerable talent at action-based characterization - a talent most writers lack. Well done.

[KT]

Haha, absolutely wonderfull! :) I like this poem, it's very fun and it flows very well. Outstanding job!!

[Mohamed Hani]

beautiful

[Bridget Murphy]

SIMPLY GREAT:):)

[CrimsonBlaze]

Fancy! It's a lovely poem and the rhyming was fun ! ( Love rhymes XD) Although the rhyming was awesome, I suggest you make it flow a little more.. - ripples arms- It seems sort of chunky -flaps arms-.. If you think not, leave it as it is, because my buffon-like brain might as well function differently :D.Otherwise, it's an awesome poem, can visulaize it and stand right there, seeing everything so perfectly.

[Manpreet]

Vow! lovely work perfectly presented with all its feel and touch intact. Amazing work!

[EMF]

I did like this. A rollicking style of whatever dialect you choose. A story marvelously told with a flow all of its own, and none the worse for it. Cracking job

[Hachamecha]

it was beautiful.

[BlueDreams]

A very nice write :-)

[MetBySunlight]

This is a rather lovely poem. I agree with Tai, the flow could do with some work.
I like the story that you told within this piece, the character seems bold and chill.
Well done, and don't stop writing (: