Invisibility

Invisibility

A Poem by Brenden Moran

Invisibility is often called a superpower
Yet from behind this wall I cower
I walk my hallways, sidewalks and streets
Stuck in my past and present defeats
This maze of intricacies is what I live
Knowing it is I, who I must forgive
But I shove this away as I seek affection
From the world that is a mirror reflection
Hoping to feel the grasp of acceptance
And be rid my shadow’s reflectance

If only to receive the blessing of visibility
But alas I fear this is an impossibility
Which leaves me to cutting and crying
To see if the blood and tears are drying
If they make their mark on my dry paper
Or float with me in my invisible caper

Know not I what day shall come in life

When my life shall be ended by this knife

But until this blood dries or its cut kills me

I will remain masked by my invisibility

© 2012 Brenden Moran


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This poem is well-written and is really deep. I'm speechless for words. Every word in this piece fits together and flows so beautifully. You have a great talent with your pen. I have never read anything so meaningful and touching on this website. AMAZING job. Keep up the outstanding work. I love this. 100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is such a dark poem filled with so much emotion. I love how it flows so well and the rhyming works great! I think it really caught my attention about the eighth line from the bottom where things started to become even more personal. Great work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very good. The rhyme seemed natural.

Here's to hoping your "cutting" is in the abstract, not fact. If so, I've been there, so encourage you (though I don't know you,) to seek assistance.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very nicely written. It flows well and offers great imagery. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wonderful. This was really good. Your rhyme doesn't seem forced and it flows beautifully. Good luck in the contest, yours is the best so far. (even if you have the only entry) :P

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is a great poem, flows greatly.
I think those who think invisibility is a superpower fail to see that seeing everything and knowing a lot is quite useless if you're never seen and noticed yourself: It keeps you alone.
And what is all you could possibly come to see and know worth when there's noone you could share your knowledge with?
I think invisibility is a good way to describe feeling unseen, therefore distant and unloved and lonely, looking for a proof you even exist, or any point in that.
Well written!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a really amazing poem. ^-^ I could feel the sadness and passion in it. Thank you for sharing~


Posted 12 Years Ago


The poem really had a life of it's own...it had great depth and was believable...it had real emotion and I could feel the pain. 100% for you :D Great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


very deep. gave me chills reading it, i cld see all the pain n abandonment in especially the last 4 lines

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a really good poem. What were you feeling when you wrote this? The last four lines are my favorite. Those kind of hit me the most. The entire poem is fantastic.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on November 26, 2011
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