Pain of loss

Pain of loss

A Poem by ThornedBlackRose
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      Breathing is like  shattered glass
The guilt swallows me whole
The pain of loss struck me hard
Tumbling me to the floor
Has no one told you she's
not breathing?
Can't you see I'm not breathing?
Can't you feel the hole in my heart?



© 2011 ThornedBlackRose


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pixieheart97 I do agree with! lols I love that song.

These peices was, in your words, saddening and reminds a fact to what you feel and think. In particular, this was great. And no doubt about it, I have felt this way too.

Thank you for the post.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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It does feel like shattered glass.... and as you breath it in, it pireces your heart...
nice:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gosh . . . I can feel the victim of loss, reaching out for help as she's dying on the floor. It literally bleeds through the words with passion.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very sad.

Posted 12 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

pixieheart97 I do agree with! lols I love that song.

These peices was, in your words, saddening and reminds a fact to what you feel and think. In particular, this was great. And no doubt about it, I have felt this way too.

Thank you for the post.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Has no one told you she's
not breathing?
Hello ,I am your mind, giving you someone to talk to
Hello
sorry thats just what it reminds me of..awesome though :D



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lovely work. you have used powerful words

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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ThornedBlackRose
ThornedBlackRose

Splendora, TX



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Hmmm I guess I'll start with this. I was born with Asperger Syndrome, and A.D.H.D. (Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder). I'm female, and was born on 7/30/94. I'm into Anime, Manga, Culture, and .. more..

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